sun kissed visions

While breathing 
bits of sentences 
in and out and all 
night long...

  You killed my slumber dead you 
  slapped me 
  with your sweet 
   haiku.

     from clouds of color
     sun kissed visions fell through sky
     to be swallowed hot


                   

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© jnw

Reviews

[Eshe' Allen]

I've never been that moved by haiku. But this was a nice ode. Maybe I need to revisit my center ;-).

[An Ordinary Woman]

Exactly. I remember those days thinking I would never rest. And you got all the words out beautifully. Just lovely. :)

[Jeremy Wyatt]

Great flow, and I love the unfettered structure of this... brill Jesse x

[Sean Allen]

50 years ago, my english teacher scolded me for not using proper punctuation in a poem I wrote and he still does to this day whenever I send him my work. I would at least move the word 'you' to the next line to maintain the flow and you might consider saying 'fall'. Nice work by the way.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was excellent, your words described all us writers! a poem well done.

[KAREN]

Outstanding work! When words flow as well as yours, it's fun and enjoyable to read. Love your word choice as well!
100/100

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Enjoyed this creative work..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon..Sunflowe

[Sweet Little Bunny]

well done. i really like :)

[MoonlitAngel]

Amazing. I love the imagery and the details.

[SM Davis]

Ah yes...it is very difficult to ignore the call of the pen when the words come feverishly in the night. Nicely done.