sun kissed visions

While breathing 
bits of sentences 
in and out and all 
night long...

  You killed my slumber dead you 
  slapped me 
  with your sweet 
   haiku.

     from clouds of color
     sun kissed visions fell through sky
     to be swallowed hot


                   

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© jnw

Reviews

[cartera]

mmmm. Need to think about his one.
ATB
Alex.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

heavy feeling pukes visual and visual sucks feeling to heavy

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I can't tell you how many sleepless nights, over the years, that I was drawn to pen and paper like an addiction. I liked this write very much!

[S. Allison (Ferrante) S..]

Very intimate, poetically analytical and raw. I love it.

[Enigma]

Wow. Something new, unique and equally good. Well written! :)

[Desert Dreamer]

You have given life to words. I like the odd format you used here, refreshing.

[Caitlynxoxo]

I think what really drew me into this poem was the title, but now I'm in love with the format, especially how the lines were almost choppy. That's what made them great though. short but sweet, i loved it :) It read like a dream

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[David W Moore III]

breathing bits of sentences - nice, although I tend to blead bits of sentences, but that's just semantics! ;) I liked it

[Lydia Blackwell]

this is fresh and brilliant. nice original phrasing which adds substance and color to your work. well done.

[Vanna Renee]

This is good, different,
I like the diversity of it,
And yet it doesn't run wild like weeds.
This is nice,
Vanna Renee