Making a mask of it, trying to hide the shouts of the tears,
But we forget that a fake smile or the make up paints the floating tears,
Blood red, blue berry purple highlighting the tear.
We pretend we are all right, forcing the lips to push the cheeks towards the eyes.
Trying to cage the tears, shutting the tears inside, covering their mouths to convert their each scream to a polite whisper.
But after all is this correct?
We can prison our tears inside, letting the fake smile touch our lips but we forget that a caged one shouts more, asking for help, trying it's best to be free, to hurt you, not giving up, and at the end freeing itself up, free from the bond of the eyes, jumping down from the eye lashes, running free, kicking on the make up.
Trying it's best to look at the world and never looking back to that cage of eyes.
And at last you were abortive, abortive in caging a little drop of water, you lost the battle against the world,you have been self defeated, thinking you are a loser, why did you cage your pearls, why didn't you scream, why did you faked the smile and why were you afraid of the world's sympathy.
I liked the poem. You raised great questions with your words and thoughts.
"We can prison our tears inside, letting the fake smile touch our lips but we forget that a caged one shouts more, asking for help, trying it's best to be free, to hurt you, not giving up, and at the end freeing itself up, free from the bond of the eyes, jumping down from the eye lashes, running free, kicking on the make up."
Many people believe the above lines. Afraid to show real face. Live and die, hurting and afraid. Thank you Shasha for sharing your worthwhile and wonderful poetry.
Coyote
So many reasons for a faked smile, becoming more common too, makes me wonder if it is a brave front for some...I have no doubt it is...strong piece Shasha :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you, Poppy!!! I am pleased to hear that you liked it!!!
Personally, upon saying it out loud... I was quite impressed, especially if this is your first attempt at creating a verbal flow... Some really strong lines, and quite sympathetic-feeling of a word choice... Which leads me to identify with this, despite not wearing lipstick, heh... Very nicely penned...
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Oh, Thank you very much!!! It means a lot! I am glad that you liked it!!!
two things, 1. wish you would have chosen a more vast vocabulary instead of repeating cage/caging, tears, etc. 2. this poem is well understood in what the text is trying to say so good job
CX
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Hm, the main problem in writing is words. I will try my best to use more words in my next poem. Than.. read moreHm, the main problem in writing is words. I will try my best to use more words in my next poem. Thank you very much Sam for reading, reviewing and advising!!!
People try their hardest to "deal" as they can...with some "things" most seldom succeed.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Yes, I have seen people saying that are all right but there eyes say what they don't. Thank you very.. read moreYes, I have seen people saying that are all right but there eyes say what they don't. Thank you very much for your review!
This, Shasha, is actually wonderful! And, after reading this, I honestly don't believe it is your first spoken word poetry. (Although, I don't know them very well.)
Keep writing!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Oh, Soumya, Thank you very much! I mean very, very much!