Dead Alive

There's a cloak on a real soul.

She wears a cloak,

You can't identify her,

She wears a long hood,

You can't see her.

She pretends she's all right,

But her eyes still got that flame,

She never shows her wounds,

For her, life is a game.

She didn't find herself,

Never seen, who she was,

But finally, when she was exposed,

Each face turned, 

each eye just closed.

A fair lady, with blood covered eyes,

Flames burnt her,

Scares covered her

Tears made it worse,

Maybe being a woman,

Was her curse.

She was crying, but still smiled,

She wanted to die,

But has to survive,

She can't make it now,

She was dead alive.

Author's Note

If any mistakes, please let me know. Tell me, what do you think? And thank you for reading.

Reviews

[AmateurWriter01]

This was well written. This is totally relatable in every way. A very powerful read, I enjoyed it all the way through.

[Shasha]

Thank you very much!!!

[apennylate]

Hrm, this brought a blank look to my face, as I realized how horrible that must be... To be a blank spot on the wall, to not be seen, heard or touched... Dead alive, smiling or crying... Flamingly penned...

[Ethan]

Great job :) I really liked it

[Shasha]

Thank you!
:-D

[Prototato]

That is some wonderfully powerful imagery, as well as food for thought. Well written! :D

[Shasha]

Thank you very very much, Prototato, I am glad that I got a thumbs up from you!

[Prototato]

Not a problem! Glad I got to read your excellent writing. ^^

[Shasha]

Thank you very much again!

[Prototato]

You are very welcome again!

[Jes' Pi]

Very meaningful poem..
I really enjoyed it. Very good!:)

[Shasha]

Thank you very much!!!

[Shasha]

Thank you very much!!!

[Soumya Deouskar]

It is flawless. What else can I say? Keep writing Sasha!!

[Shasha]

Oh really, thank you Soumya!!

[Ruth]

I understand this well, you have penned a situation that many can relate to, how many of us wear a smile when inside there are tears and storms? Sad fact of reality, beautifully done :)

[Shasha]

Oh, thank you very much. I am pleased to hear that you liked my poem...

[Najam Us Saher]

I like the description you have given in this poem. I loved the usage of the word dead alive in the last line. Well written.

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Najam Us Saher...

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Wow!! That was pretty deep, girl! Keep it!!

[Shasha]

Thank you very much.