Dark Death

Death is dark but bright on the other side.

Ha! I am dark,unfortunate, scary. Whenever I see myself in the mirror of dark, even the mirror breaks down. I don't have any face, just darkness and a dark heart. People don't want to come to me, they think that if they will marry me, hey will divorce the world. I don't know how many times I am married. Tears are my happiness, gloom gives me power. I love to tease people surrounded with gloom, I love to marry people who are scared of me. Proud to say that I am dark. I love to chase people who run away from me. I don't like if anyone thinks that I am bright. Hate to listen anyone speaking that I am a bright sky in a dark cave or a blooming flower in a brown, rusted, dry tree because I never want to be anyone's hope. The ones who think that birth is cruel, life is a punishment are my favorite because they  also hate my enemy, birth. The fact is true that birth is cruel, even to me, it is more powerful then me. But then also it has a bright face, still, has a darker heart then me. But it is able to hide it's heart under it's brightness. And you are the only one to help it in this. When a person is born, everyone gets tears of happiness in their eyes. But no one understands that the one who is born, participated in a race and now have to struggle. This unknowingly happiness gives a bright colour to the birth. I am black because of your fear and gloom. I agree that I love to tease you in when you are in gloom but if you ask why, the reason is that when that person started his journey, you never made yourself strong about the fact that he will finish his journey some day. You should be happy if anyone has died as now he is free from this cruel world. At the last, though I don't want to tell you but you read or listened me so calmly that's why I am telling you. I never tease a dead person as he came to me leaving my enemy birth. So it's pretty loyal of me that I do not tease that person. And at last read or listen this " Make me your friend, I will be loyal,  Make me your enemy, I will be more loyal." 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Dust That Drifts Throug..]

I feel like this could symbolize death and its thoughts on life and humans. This is a good short story.

[Shasha]

Oh, thank you very much willowwaldgrave

[Cy!]

For constructive criticism I would give:

1: You typed: 'This unknowingly happiness gives bright colour to the birth.'
Could be: 'This strange happiness gives bright color to this birth.'

2: You typed: 'I don't like if anyone thinks that I am bright.'
Could be: 'I laugh at the fools who dare to say,"You are light." And mock those who say, "You are the sun!"'

3: I think you should break your story into paragraphs. With each new subject referring to darkness or light you should make a paragraph by pressing, "ENTER" twice. This can add to the dramatic effect.

4: You typed: 'Whenever I see myself in the mirror of dark, even the mirror breaks down.'
Could be: 'With one glance into the reflection of my own darkness, glass shatters into fear."

5: You typed: 'People don't want to come to me, they think if they marry me, hey will divorce the whole world.'
Could be: 'Residing with someone like me for eternity imprints terror into their souls. Taking no pity, they know I will surely discard them into my forgotten oblivion.'

6: Proof read before you post. I can see a lot of errors, that I am sure you didn't mean to type.

That's all for now. Let me know if this helped, because I think you are really going somewhere with this. Keep trying, and best of luck! ^w^

~LG

[Shasha]

That's a nice idea! Thank you Locket Grey for such nice advises.

[Shasha]

Thank you... V.s. pleasure to listen that van..

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

This is one hell of a something, girl. I'm so proud of you!! Ickle Shana-kins is growing up and learning!! This one is actually really good.