White roses

In this poem white roses are telling their feelings as they are on the coffins of the braves(soldiers).

Near coffins,we lie the white roses,

Silently, but pouring our tears,

Asking people, every one is loosing their heart,

Why we're kept apart.

Are we kept here for a purpose,

Or  kept away from gloom.

Will we also distribute our hearts soon,

Or will be here till night,

Dropping tears alone and seeing the moon.

Our braves are sleeping nicely underground,

And we're awake seeing the gloomy night,

Where there's only dark, no light,

Where there is screams , no sound.

Today our hearts are filled with pride,

today we want to shout,

And keep our tears aside.

And tell the world,

"Hey, today we don't feel like plucked,

But feel like we're the best lucked." 

 

   

Author's Note

Ignore Grammer problems and please comment!

Reviews

[Dust That Drifts Throug..]

You captured the tone perfectly. Keep up the good work!

[Shasha]

Thank you again willowwaldgrave.

[Cy!]

This is really nice. I wanna see more of this. Now can you exactly tell me what white roses represent? I know red roses represent love, and blue represents miracle....

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Locket Grey and white rose represents peace.

[alexandra]

I loved it!! :) very emotive!! Well done

[Shasha]

Thank you very much....

[Sir_Anonymous]

You're welcome and just a side note I did not notice your author note said ignore grammar... Non the less my OCD is calmed down now when I read this thank you.

Sincerely, Sir_Anonymous

[Sir_Anonymous]

I am pretty captivated by the way you write you really seem to know how to arrange words to make objects and things seem like they can actually talk and feel... However hate to be that guy but some words don't flow so well with the sentence such as "Our braves our sleeping nicely underground." You should put "are" instead of the second our. As well as the end where instead of putting "proud" you need "pride"....Hmmm... Unless you did this on purpose to further personify the flowers having their own way of talking and matter of thinking... Either way It was still a good poem keep them coming ;)

[Soumya Deouskar]

It's so mesmerising!
It leaves us in an amazement and reality. Keep writing Sasha!