Revolving Daydreams

Water shimmers in midday sun.

White slabbed paths feel light,

 dry gusts of wind.

Leaves drop silently from trees.

The wind picks up.

The wind dies down.

Featureless winds.

Featureless windows.

Featureless doors.

This is a clean, symmetrical city.

This city lays empty.

Light now,

 where shadows once stood...

Where shadows of the mind now stand.

No cars,

just white slabbed paths....

 and shadows of the mind.

The building,

seemingly made of cubic zirconia,

Standing there!

Just standing there.

Windows,

so seemingly 'Fragile',

you would just fall through.

Windows so seemingly fragile

you just fall through.

It seems a thought has escaped me,

reverberating  so frequently,

that it has pierced and reverberated throughout

every windows being! 

The cubic zirconia takes more time;

cracking and grinding,

before its top gives way.

For a moment,

 the glass and cubic zirconia

fall on everyone;

but the slow sun rises,

and the ruins shine.

Author's Note

cubic zirconia
an artificial crystal resembling a diamond in refraction, dispersion, hardness, and color, used in jewelry. Abbreviation: CZ

Reviews

[Ashley_Pietro]

your use of repetition proves to be very effective. i also appreciate your use of nature vs. industry...in my personal interpretation, it provides a clear difference between the worlds you paint in this poem. i enjoyed it thoroughly. thanks for sharing your work!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you Ashley, I look forward to hearing more from you!

[Brook]

I really like this, great job :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Nice imagery and flow, not sure the purpose of the spaces, just a formatting preference I assume.

[m.s.early]

Dazzling display of imagery

[Madalyn Beck]

The description here is breathtaking. You did a fantastic job putting this poem together and pulling me in. Great write! :)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you so much :)

[Tina Louise UK]

You are so good at describing places, makes the reader feel they are there...enjoyed :) x

[Karci Clest]

This so creative! It makes me feel, curious. I want to explore this place, see more of it. It screams such power in the words! My favorite part is "Windows so seemingly fragile It is stands out the most to me. Thank you for sharing this!
you just fall through."