pharologists landmark

Shattered shards of clear quartz,

Decorate my calm coastline.

Piece by piece it stretches,

from old to new horizons.

Gaining and gathering, 

what is gathering and gaining;

oh the sands, 

infinite aspects in finite views.

I look outwardly in 

to see whats inwardly out;

I am the lighthouse, 

 which rose from sand.

oh, my light is the solace of life

to far off ships; 

a warning to those, 

who stray to close.

My mistress is true nature,

and with every stone cast into 

the darkness of abrasive night,

morning shows she expands my coast. 

So please rejoice as I share my light ,

but take care not too be blinded. 

Reviews

[M. L. Zane]

Ah, Shane. Refreshing to see a short poetry request. These are a little easier to handle than the prose I usually get asked to look over. Anyway, you have summoned me, and thus I will do as you ask.

My first suggestion will likely be an unusual one. I loathe the title. Seriously, can't stand it. Though writers and word lovers in general may know Pharology, and it does make sense, it just feels too wordy for such a quick hitting and strong work. Yes, I have positive marks for you, but I prefer to make the more important commentary first. I recommend referencing timelessness or the sand. How about "Hourglass"? This poem slowly reveals a distant lighthouse to your reader, and the title should give a little sense of mystery. I don't like titles that give away the ending, if you catch my drift.

You've earned a soft spot in my heart for successful alliteration. I don't think I need to remind you how powerful this can be in the right hands, and you have not only used it correctly, but thoroughly weaponized it. Bravo. It also implies a deeper meaning that only some may catch; are YOU the lighthouse? Or, is no one?

Beyond that, I have little else to say, as my only grievance with this work revolves around the title. Still, if you ever need an editor for larger works, I'm always accepting new contracts. I'll be in touch. Oh, and give some of my stuff a read sometime. Song of Sinai is back in the workshop, but the more folks that know my name, the better.

Regards,
-M.L. Zane

[Tina Louise UK]

Eloquent and beautifully done :) x

[Julie Spade]

Crafted beautifully ! The comparisons, the depth of it all and the imagery is spot on grand! The words flow with one another causing for the poem to have a statement of its own ! Brilliant :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is written so smoothly.The lines flow so well.I really liked it shane :)

[Tilda]

It's beautiful, You get these images in your head while you read it. I like it

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Oh, woe is me,
T' have seen what I have seen, see what I see!

[Desiree]

It is beautiful how you compare yourself to a lighthouse here allowing the reader a glimpse at you. Great poem Shane!! Thank you!

[Michelle N. H.]

A-mazing. It comes off as both gentle and dramatic through the depiction of a calm coastline contrasted to a lighthouse rising from sand. Incredible imagery.

[Ashiq B]

Simply brilliantly strung together!!! Very well written!!!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Why thank you!

[BlackHeart]

Wow.... I not sure if there is even a better word to describe this poem just wow. You did an amazing job with this writing piece. It is truly amazing

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you so much I'm glad you have enjoyed it!!

[Tess Nicholls]

Love the alliteration, 'Shattered shards,' 'Gathering and gaining.' And that line, 'Infinite aspects in finite views,' is what being an artist is all about. A serious poem but wonderfully musical to say out loud. Nice one Irish ;)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Keep reading :)