Above the black clouds

The universal pull and push has worn me,

 beyond a sense of self, once again.

The great metaphor spins fear as safety, 

and differentiates the habitat from the cage.

Oh look at these evil primates,

Basking in subconscious glories!!

I fooled myself.

Holding nothing, I let go.

The dream starts as twilight falls around me.

Milk white clouds fill the sky above,

and rain clarity upon my mind. 

I sense, the sense of sensation, 

and expand with no boundaries.

Maybe I am the most almighty planet,

but still I only revolve around, 

what is revolving still. 

Reality sits with two burning eyes,

Twitching with pulsing frustration.

The central chamber 

of consciousness ferments, 

until a molten state, 

and vents its thoughts

above the surface! 

Banal Horizons are set on fire, 

While rivers of prediction evaporate. 

I can see your judgmental eyes;

Sweet serenity, I am free. 

Reviews

[Daffy]

Well, Shane....wonderful words and a lovely metre. Flows easily. My mind went to the universe with spiral galaxies and gravitational forces, with volcanoes and molten matter flowing all over. A planet's mind talking to God within an ever expanding universe. I saw the milky way with its association with earth and I saw 'man' in his primitive ways of greed and violence.
That was my mind as I read this poem. The history of the earth? Hmmmm fascinating read.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

A remarkable review :) thank you for your honesty and insight as to its impact on you :)!

[Nusquam Esse]

You got a typo, you wrote noting instead of nothing. This aside, I like this poem. I gives a nice out of body sensation, and a uniquely versed external view of this world. It almost makes me wonder what would happen if I kept flowing outward; would there be a limit? Definitely a fun read; just wish I was better at reviewing poetry. Unfortunately, it is not my forte.

[Rose Diamond]

You have left me speechless. I wish my vocabulary was larger so I could find the words to express my feelings for this poem! All I can say is that I loved it very much, and it has definitely become a new favourite of mine!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you for the compliments :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Desiree]

It is a beautiful poem, vivid as the plight of the writer. Great poem. Thank you for sharing!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

thank you :)

[Lyn Anderson]

sweet serenity I am free. What a great end to a fantastic piece.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[ashebye]

I feel like I am reading the work of a famous poet! Well done:)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

really? I'm glad you like it:)

[ZeniaK]

"Maybe I am the most almighty planet, but still I only revolve around, what is revolving still." and "I can see your judgmental eyes; sweet serenity, I am free." are my favorite lines, because I got that feeling when you read something, and it really stands out to you and when you read it you feel this sense the powerfulness of it and what was said. Does that make sense? Amazing write!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Yes, I do :) This is an amazing review, thank you.

[ZeniaK]

anytime buddy :)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Your pen dear, brings me to other worlds, forlorn worlds where one could write as you do.... it's fantastic poetry. You always rock. The drama in it, (which is made up for sure) because you're brighten... Smiling here.... is artistic, and well spelled.... I love your love for the universe, the rich metaphor of it, and the talent to write so well about it. Just keep on shining Shane. The alliteration in this is lovely.

I love that you're free.
I'm too.
We should fly! ha! JUST KIDDING!

- Elisa

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I'm glad you think I should keep at this!

;) winks..... keep shining shane, that's your new nickname! "Shining Shane" I love it.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I only seen this comment now :) "Shining Shane"! Thank you!!

You're welcome bud! :)

[Anita Singh]

Nice poem! A detailed description of the surroundings adds some great zing to the poem. Keep up the good work!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

thank you :)