Seconds

The lump in my throat is dryly swallowed. 
I breed out but feel sick 

as the air draws back to my lungs. 
You don't even know but in seconds, 
you have changed my life completely. 
Momentary but eternal, 
I felt life's chemical rush.  
I feel life changing. 
  
In a succession of seconds, 
I seen your mothers eyes waiting for mine; 
In silence she waited for the grey to pass.  
We then knew that we did not matter anymore. 
No single thing was unknown, 
No single thought was not you. 
I feel something deep inside, 
 it starts too flow through me. 
Love ferments in unconditional purity, 
with thought of you. 
  
The butterfly's dance too  
my cardiac rhythm.     
A true friendship relaxes the moment with humor. 
The road we travel twists and turns but still we drive on. 
This is the end of life as we know it but 
still we drive on unflinching. 
  
I sit back and wait and think. 
In three minutes It feels I have spent a lifetime with you. 
In three minutes I have spent a lifetime with you. 
"Negative" and just like that, 
 I watched you disappear. 
In a single word you were erased. 
  
It all turns grey and I walk into an old world 
with a new contrast. 
I walk in the Nobel mans direction, 
following with an enlightened mind. 
I do not stay without reason;  
and so I must think, 
neither did you. 

Reviews

[Daffy]

Good heavens this is deep! So interesting, it deserves more study. First impressions are the moments of awareness that we all experience sometimes when we love at first sight. Very thoughtful poem. My favourite lines are:- In three minutes It feels I have spent a lifetime with you.
In three minutes I have spent a lifetime with you.
This is so true of love at first sight, but I ever seen it put so well in two lines. Well done.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I love your interpretation :) thank you!

[Daffy]

You are very welcome,

[Troy Henson]

There is a lot of love combined with pure despair in this piece. You capture the raw emotion of love in it's early stages so very well. Love at first sight....it's hard and the unfortunate thing is it can be gone just as quickly as it was found leaving a void.

Great piece.
Regards

[ZeStrange]

3 minutes more than enough for eternal bonds to be built, to dance in joy or writhe in pain.
3 minutes is all that it takes for a memory to concretise, be it colourful or grey.
Those 3 minutes experienced, has been beautifully made sense of and accepted by you.

My fave line has to be : "I do not stay without reason; and so I must think, neither did you."

In my opinion: You've portrayed such grief, but at the same time such beauty in handling and accepting the grief. Knowing that there must have been a greater reason when "Negative" happened. Such strength in character. A beautiful mind, you have right there. You had me glued throughout, as though watching the events unfold. Almost as if I was physically there. Have to say, its truly a beautiful poem, Shane! I just rose from sleep, in bed and this is the first piece of my reading for today. Simply beautiful!

Thank you!

Happy Holidays and a Merry Xmas to you!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you so much! This review has made my Christmas eve!

[Meredith Grayson]

Wow, great poem. I love the way it flows and the part with the butterfly. :)

[shawnt5604]

very compelling, makes me want to keep reading! If I had to critique, I would like to have seen a little more structure and fluid transitions between lines, but maybe that's just your style. very pleasant to read!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I'll take that into consideration, thanks :)

[prodicallife]

That is very professional approach to a very well carved and painted lyrics that you have written.

I think this is what you call watching a movie, I was with you all through the words were racing through my nerves.

Much appreciations.

Keep writing good.

Stay blessed
Regards

Prodical

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you! I'm glad I have you on my journeys! May kind thoughts gather around you!

[prodicallife]

Pleasure is mine.

Thanks for your kind reply.

[Coyote Poetry]

Time is a very good tool for poetry and writing. Seconds can feel like hours if we are in a certain position. I like the situations and the thoughts in the poem. You create a interesting vision. I did like the closing lines. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

This is probably one of the most accurate and understanding reviews I have received! Thank you for your time my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I truly hope you will review more!

[Coyote Poetry]

Maybe later. I work tonight. I work 55 hours in four days and I get four days off. I will return and read more of your work.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

No rush!! I will relish the suspense!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Great poem! Very deep and thoughtful.......and the complex style of writting just makes it even more beautiful! I loved the concept....... Good job!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you my friend :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

You are welcome:):)

[R J Askew]

Am reading you in a kitchen in St.Albans, with an empty bowl of porridge before me. Grey n wet it is outside. Big shout Leinster boy! I think I've spent about 5 minutes with you .. will spend more anon. I like the notion of 'unconditional purity' driving things.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I hope it has left you as fulfilled as your porridge! thank you for your comment!

[R J Askew]

Yes, reading you was nourishing to the soul.

[MoriartyMesa]

Every now and than my mind will read something and think of music not sure if this work but it is where the mind went https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8oUuu_bUxtU

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

oh the mind is a great thing for seeing something in a new form.