Outlines

Beautiful her Eyes. Beautiful her skin. 
She stands there confident and intelligent.
My heart pains with every breath I take.
This admiration is a dangerous overdose.
Words fail to describe her.
Words are just a shadow she portrays.
Eyes dead to all around,
Slowly. I slip more into the abysses. 

Understand there is little hyperbole in hysteria. 
IT is the illusory assumption 
we defend with exaggeration all that we love.  
Sometimes what we perceive, seeming hypothetical, 
is the very reality of what the mind has seen. 

The day is over and i track to bed. 
Laying there my eyes close. 
I enter the darkroom of my mind. 
I see her face gentle with a smile. 
While in detox an idea dawns. 

In a world where i never was 
Her face still smiles. 
There is no desolation or deterioration  
that she swore blind would occur without me. 
Another greets her and touches her lips. 
I see his eyes devoid of the love she needs. 
She still stands there...content. 
Eventually I am freed from the 
depths of my minds detention. 
Now a thought will forever daunt me 
when she looks into my eyes. 
No matter what the strength in words. 
If it was not me...it would be another.  

Reviews

[Matt Sayer]

We adorn our words with glittering gold and shade them in ruby hues to try and capture the beauty within our mind's eyes. Exaggeration is a necessary catalyst to translate the vision in our head into lines and curlicues. I must say, I really love the line "Words are just a shadow she portrays." You've hit on the impossibility of truly encapsulating the wonder encased within our skulls. Well done :)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Bravo on the review, Bravo my friend!

[Tina Louise UK]

wow..simply breath taking, so very beautiful :) x

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Why thank you!

[Julie Spade]

The conclusion within the storyline is simple but the way you word it such powerful emphasis ! Well done indeed, Shane !

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Romantic and so very thoughtful!
I like your way of writing!
I really enjoyed the read my friend! :):)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you for the warm comment :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

You are welcome! :)

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned...enjoyed very much...Rose:)

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you rose! Add me as a friend so I can check out your work!

[Tom C]

Now a thought will forever daunt me
when she looks into my eyes.
Perhaps you meant Haunt me?
Keep them coming. Good poem.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

No its daunt, as in to dishearten. I find it represents the power of human insecurity towards a significant other at a set interval, in this case when he sees her.

[Tom C]

oh...ok...

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thanks though...I like the way your aiming to keep me Sharpe! Its important to a writer!

[Chris]

a very strong end... and thought-full

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Why thank you friend! How I hope you enjoyed it!

[Hailey Shay]

Beautiful! Love flows through the words, off the page and into my heart! Really great work

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you :) oh the tragedy's of life.

[Sami Khalil]

She should be thrilled ...That is a wonderful write from your romantic pen....:)...................