Heart Ardency

         Heart Ardency

              You stay with behind

              Outside of the invisible wall

              Do hide-and-seek with deep of heart

              You caught by asleep heart

                  Heart stay with swing

                  And attach with dreadful Sea

                  Its lost every time

                  That's adjust with endless world

            Run with paceful air

            In very far with paradise

            As like glowing Star

            With clamour gather fair

                  I feel many expectation in heart

                 That's adjust with heart elegance

                  Lighting with Lamp of love

                  In your closed heart.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong description made the poem a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[RachelReaper]

Beautiful word description, i really like this piece :)

[Marie]

Lovely flow...gentle, graceful ambience of hearts...

[Shamsuddin Mazed]

May be....

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent imagery of beauty!

[That1Nerd23]

This is beautiful.

[Toni Blackerby]

this nice :)

[Shamsuddin Mazed]

Thank you..

[Amanda J. S.]

I have some tips for you if you want to get better at English (I am from a little country called Denmark, so English isn't my first language either!): Start reading English books! every time you hit a word that you don't know, look it up ^^
Also: keep writing! Every day if you have time!
And if you want some grammar tips, look up "Grammar Girl" on google ^^

Please do not be offended, but your English really needs some training if you want to get out your message... ^^

Good luck!

[Shamsuddin Mazed]

ok.thank You..

[Amanda J. S.]

you're welcome ^^

[Shamsuddin Mazed]

ok.

[Marie]

Actually, I found the convulated English to be like an abstract painting...the meaning not sharply defined but free flowing...