UNFINISHED**

I need to know if I should omit the last four lines. Opinions please.

Insignificant in this moment of judgement

Scripted verses of melodramatic scenes

Words from a hallowed heart

Gripped in despair and self-pity

Ultimate forboding of sweet rapture

Carressingly seduced by beautiful melodies

Held up for all to see

Crushingly dejected, lonely again

Lovely dreams, laid to rest

Grieving over, time to be okay, cliche

 

 

 

Held tight in painful rejection

Scattered tears cover the page

Pain grips me, takes my breath

Heart ripped at the seams

Reviews

[Crusaderscross]

Hello, in my honest opinion The last four lines take the build up away. We are drawn in right until the end and left unfinished. But that is my opinion. Other than that, I love your style of writing. Really my style. Will continue to read your stuff.