Blur of Colors

As you pass through my mind for the millionth time today, 
I try to keep my eyes open,
to appear normal and happy.

Though everyone can see through that as the colors around me start to blur. 

Globs of black,
of white and blue,
green blurs as well.

Just as everything goes pitch black,
and I feel the streams falling over my cheeks...

And now everyone knows what I have known for a long time,
that the pain has become unbearable.

Reviews

[Perdition]

This one actually really caught my attention. Something about this and the innocence of it goes beyond the harsh noise of pain. It stacks and owns the page with beauty and scales the depth of the reader's emotion in only a few well written lines. Very raw~very blue! Thanks.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautifully penned but yet heart wrenching
in some way
with raw pure emotions here.



As you pass through my mind for the millionth time today,
I try to keep my eyes open,
to appear normal and happy.

Though everyone can see through that as the colors around me start to blur.


I love how your words flowed upon
the lines very easy to understand and a
nice flow here.


Thank you for sharing blessings. Benita

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I love this Zoei. It breaks my heart but it has a tone and voice to it so completely unlike any of your other works. I like the format here, it stands out and it makes the piece a little easier to digest since it is pure emotion. I've felt like this so many times and I hate knowing that you finally understand it. Amazingly penned, beautiful use of color and form. The word choice is simple without being dull and the flow is perfectly silky. Greatly written.