Trying

Trying

A Poem by Shadows Ember

I tried to be what you wanted,
I tried to be there. 
I'm sorry that I wasn't enough for you,
i'll try harder next time. 
I guess I am done trying,
because I feel like your heart is with her. 
Maybe I am wrong,
but you never gave me reason to think otherwise.
Every song I hear reminds me of you,
and all I can seem to do is fight back tears.
But I am done fighting,
because I know you gave up long ago...

© 2014 Shadows Ember


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the fourth line says "i'll" every other instance of this is capitalized so to continue your flow and style you should probably capitalize this one too - unless of course you wanted to draw emphasis to this particular instance as in you feel you cannot try harder even though you say you will or as if this means more than anything else you say here (though I'm not leaning towards the second. Not with what I know about you. Not with who this is for. )

I truly enjoyed seeing this piece from you, it's just the kind of thing you needed out of your system, especially lately. I'm sorry things are not always easy to move on from, him especially, but you've done better than I would have

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Shadows Ember
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My name is Ember. i am 17. Senior in high school, and I love to write, especially romance stories and poems. I'm not an expert so bear with me. My favorite author is most definitely Edgar Allen Poe. I.. more..

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