My Despair

                    The clouds go dark and gray
That weary night of nothing to say
                   You said the words
I tried to muster up the courage.
                               As the tears fell,
I was caught in that spell.
                          And just like that, all was lost.
It just isn't fair,
                  How the one i love so dear is the reason for my despair.

Reviews

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

This is a captivating piece. I'm really glad its short because i sometimes get bored with really long poems. But this one kept me interested. Great job.

Thanks for sharing.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

don't bow down to your feelings I never make a choice when
I am happy or confused I allow god to
Don't Imprison your self in your feelings and pain allow yourself
to heal in time we forgive and we are suffering
in that pain ourselves when we don't let it go or heal from that pain.


at times it hurts for me to love but when I feel broken
my heart grows stronger as I would rather not feel Anger as
I don't want my heart to harden from the Anger.


I hope all is well thank you for sharing.



And I understand how this feels but when we
reflect heal and let it go when we are ready it is
like a heavy weight being lifted from our hearts amazing
feeling.

Blessings. Benita

[Aiden Christopher Paffo..]

Love is pain, and it often times. Hurts. Excellent. Penning

[MomzillaNC]

How can we ever understand when the thing that gave us so much joy becomes the source of our pain?

[Shadows Ember]

im still trying to figure it out

[MomzillaNC]

There's only one solution. Find closure and love again.

[Shadows Ember]

its hard when you still want nothing but that person

[MomzillaNC]

Yeah. It's a gut-wrenching heartache. Who knows, it might work out. But, you can't put your life on hold waiting for something to rewrite the past. All you can do is move forward and reach for the future, and for real mutual love. Clinging to the things we have no power to change will only make mincemeat of our hearts.

[Shadows Ember]

Well its hard to move on when there was no way we had a chance. not til next year.

[MomzillaNC]

You know best what's needed in your situation. Just be starkly honest with yourself and make the best decision you're able to make -- even if it's the most heartbreaking one.

[Shadows Ember]

im going to try. I know where my heart is. but i doubt ill be able to move on til i get a chance.

[MomzillaNC]

Chances and dreams… We make our own chances. But, only when we dream a dream we can make come true.

[Shadows Ember]

Yes, tis true.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

Way too many people can relate to this, trust me I know. But at the same time you've made this so personal and let your heart shine through in such a perfectly sad way. Amazing piece, though Might I suggest taking it out of the center format? It distracts the audience a little with this piece.

Also the last line I think would have more of an impact if it were separated from the rest of the piece by a blank line or two or something like that.

"I was caught in that spell.
And just like that, all was lost."

^ I love that