In A Mirror

As I look in the mirror
What do I see
A girl in a box
Longing to be free
She doesn't speak
She simply sits there
Alone with a face of no glee

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

Short but expressive. Nicely done.

[Sindu]

Few words that can say it all! It's simple. Sometimes what we see is pretty simple but we look at it; not see it. Beautifully penned! Dark and simple!

She doesn't speak
She simply sits there
Alone with a face of no glee

I like these lines! I guess many can't always speak there mind or .. just didn't find a situation to.

[Coyote Poetry]

You said everything in so few words. Being in a box can leave us wishing for a escape. The poem create thoughts and visions. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shadows Ember]

Why thank you (:

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[shadow charm]

You are alone! But it is good to look in the mirror to see the reflection of you. Nice. =)

[BennyBooth]

I have the haunting image of sad girl in my brain now :(( very nice job ... :)

[Salem]

I like this piece, it has a nice rhythm. :D

[Aiden Christopher Paffo..]

I wish I could reach out to the girl in this piece and just give. Her a big hug. You are a great. Writer.

[Shadows Ember]

Why thank you :)

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

Alone with a face of no glee

^ That should probably be without glee instead of "of no glee" simply because as it is it is distracting the reader from the wonderful flow you had already created.

I like how short the piece is and yet is still deep enough that you are sharing a part of yourself with us (the audience). Actually this is one of my favorites from you, but I think it would fit a little better in the sad category, not really dark or fantasy.

Anyway, nice job