The Beauty Within

People often tell me to walk away, 

And they often tell me you aren't good enough,

But they do not know you.

They do not know the side of you I see,

The side I fell in love with.

I just want them to be able to see you as I see you.

To realize how truly amazing you are.

And how truly amazing you make me feel I have become.

You have seen me through rose-colored glasses at one point,

You make me feel as though I am a bluebird trapped in the body of a girl,

Like I am actually meant to fly.

You make me feel as if the clouds are merely a moment away,

Even though we are miles apart.

You will always have my love and they will not tear us apart.

Author's Note

LAC

Reviews

[Mark]

Other’s opinions should not count and I love that this poem shows that clearly, how one feels in love is the truth of the matter, it changes us, and we do fly, floating. As for ‘they’ eventually they will see the changes too, and then will understand.
Thank you for sharing your writing.

[Chebem Ike]

I love this keep it up! Its revealing

[Arsh]

Even though we are miles apart.
You will always have my love and they will not tear us apart... Whao! So good to read such lines! lol

Blue`s my fav. color, btw. So, yea... thanks for loving me, Ember. I love you as well. *Smiling* ;) Nice poetry. Keep it up!

[Mauricio Montoya]

so true. Love how this piece comes together. excellent write.

[Mirra]

The beauty of the heart is it sees what the eyes couldn't. I think it doesn't matter what other people say even if it hurts, as long as it doesn't affect the relationship it's nothing but a fad. What's important is that you know him. But what I appreciated in this poem is that I didn't merely felt love but also fear - fear of losing someone. Beautiful piece!

[Briana O'Connor]

The feeling behind this is stunning and powerful. You've managed to make sadness and loss absolutely alluring. I love when someone writes in prose poetry form. Clear, fluid and to the point.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

in love not being with them and feeling trapped
but I love how you put it beautiful words painted
from the view of a Lovely Young lady.


Thank you for sharing I hope everything works out.


Blessings. Benita

[Derrick Bower]

This definitely seems like the words of a young woman in love with someone her folks or maybe her friends don't approve of. Whether or not she is correct in her love is unimportant, because this poem is simply about the passion behind her feelings.
There is certainly nothing wrong with this poem, but I feel as if you restrained yourself just a little bit in writing this. I could be wrong, but I see this in myself sometimes, where I don't let all of my emotions pour out because I want to poem to remain...I'm not sure how to put it...structured, perhaps? Or more conventional, rather? Either way, I feel as though we are only seeing part of the vast string of emotions you may have been feeling at this time. Maybe there was some resentment towards whoever was threatening to tear you apart? Anyway, I still enjoyed the poem and I plan on reading more of your work in the future. Thank you for contributing your art!

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I honestly don't think I could have said it any better myself. Thank you for reiterating the beauty of such a remarkable piece!

[Shadows Ember]

Thank you very much. You seem to have me pinned perfectly lol

[Aiden Christopher Paffo..]

This is adorable. Excellent. Work

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I love the imagery in this piece, you definitely penned something phenomenal. The way you share your heart with us in this write is great as well, Thank you for sharing.