Emotions

Emotions

A Poem by Shadowkai
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Keep your emotions strong everyone

"
Hey now, come on now
It's alright if your emotions are strong
Fighting the hate
Wading through the darkness

You are strong,
And they all know it
You hold your ground
As they try to break your resolve

In the end you, stand above the rest
And your never gonna come down
Because you know the secret
And you use it to save those in need

It won't matter, if the sky falls around you
They will never bring you down
So come on now
It'll be alright because your emotions are strong

© 2015 Shadowkai


Author's Note

Shadowkai
We must all stay strong and help those who believe they can't be. If you seeing someone being bullied, stand up for not only them but yourself. This is our world, let's make it one where we call can stay emotionally strong.

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I love the message you are sending here. Truly, the only persons opinion of you that matters the most is yourself. Never be ashamed to be who you are, and if you are bullied for it, hold yourself above them. Bullying it a disgusting problem and I support anyone trying to help make a difference, so thank you! And by the way, great write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"in the end you, stand above the rest" the comma isn't needed here. although i'm just being picky. it was a great poem and i love the message. good job

Posted 9 Years Ago


I agree.
"It won't matter, if the sky falls around you
They will never bring you down
So come on now
It'll be alright because your emotions are strong"
We stay stay positive and go forward always. Thank you for sharing the hopeful and positive words.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Shadowkai

9 Years Ago

You are very welcome, i sure do hope you enjoy the rest of my writing :)
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

I will read more now.
I like it. I particularly like your voice--it's consistent and strong throughout the poem.

A couple comments that I think could make the poem even better.
First, think about some punctuation. I know you don't want much, but the comma in the very first line is powerful because you have no other punctuation in the rest of the poem. Where else do you want your reader to pause? Pick 1 or 2 really powerful statements and let your reader breathe!
Second, the line "Your hold the greatest weapon" I find unclear. Your hold on what? The rest of the stanza is so good! Just consider that line.
Finally, in the very last stanza the line "It won't matter if the sky falls around us" for the whole rest of the poem you've used you, I think it would be more consistent to say "It won't matter if the sky falls around you."
Again, small critiques. I like it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shadowkai

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much i will fix those problems as soon as i have the time :)
Shadowkai

9 Years Ago

I made some modifications is it more to your liking now?
viola

9 Years Ago

Yes! I think the few changes you made are great! Except I think you mean "You hold your ground" no.. read more

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Added on October 18, 2015
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Shadowkai
Shadowkai

Rochester, NY



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I am a 16 year old writer, i will be posting one to two poems each day. On every Monday i will post additions to "The End of Humanity" and every Wednesday i will add to "Bane of The Darkness". Fridays.. more..

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