No name

Whatever you decide but I really don't hate people most of my poems are on other peoples point of view of life ya know?

No name is my name.

No, first name.

Name, last name.

I do not deserve a name.

For I do not belong.

So call me No name.

No, first name.

Name, last name.

It sounds foolish I know.

But my pain is not for you to understand.

I dont care though what you think.

 My pain is not to share.

I hate all of you people.

You make no sense out of anything.

I hate you all.

You try to understand the impossible.

But you know nothing of the situation.

And those who know nothing can understand nothing.

This is why my name is No name cause I dont want anyone to understand me,

starting with the name.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jolyrose]

Nice and angry, like we all get. I enjoyed that. I also liked the refusal of taking a name. Names have power and the character refuses to give that up.

[Mpotavin]

Very vague and general. Examples: you people (who?), the impossible(what?), the situation(what?). The more vague you are, the less people identify with your writing. Try to put in some specifics like people, places and things. There is nothing real to hold on to.

I find it odd that "My pain is not to share", yet here we are. Also, "I dont want anyone to understand me". If you want to use these lines then you will need to create a character that says them. I have difficulty rectifying the concept that these are other people's views when you use I.

You have decided to tread in rather dangerous waters by stating that you are writing other people's views. You are choosing a topic that you will never truely get right and can only write about in the most general of terms without putting in tons of research and even then there is a chance that you get it wrong. Its the difference between stick figures and someone with shape and definition, curves and personality.