Old Man

There is no ryhme nor form, simply words to describe a nightly walk.

Sun falls
Day�s heat surrenders
Night comes
Dark coolness gentles air.

Old man
Circuitous route begins
Winding path at waters edge
Moonlight reflects to eye

Old man
Memories surge forth
Sad smile reflects
Days of happiness
Days of pain

Old man
Step by step
Continues on
Following so familiar trail
Past dark water sparkling bright
Into dim grove so black

Old man
Meandering along in silence
Thoughts of other nights
So filled with conversation
Companionship
Such simple pleasure

Old man
Midway he halts
Simple clearing open to sky
Old scarred wooden bench
Here so many quiet conversations
So many words and thoughts
Of future days that would not come
Of Time and Wishes for those to be left behind.

Old man
Peering up to cloudless sky
Knowing what would be seen
The pulsing red sitting shoulder high
A silent greeting
A warm embrace

Old man
Time to go

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

So many words and thoughts
Of future days that would not come

Yes...all too bittersweet life's pathway is sometimes...
Great write.

[Windy]

Old man, young man, either way this "walk" was sadly beautiful. You brought tears to my eyes just imagining being out for a walk on a path well worn it seems. The 'old scarred wooden bench, with so many quiet conversations...Of time and wished for those to be left behind", there is SO much feeling in your words. "Poetry" alone does not define it. What a wonderful read, thank you so very much. ;)

[Samuel Dickens]

This is just beautiful. The imagery is vivid and appealing. At 60 years old, I can picture myself as the old man very easily. A terrific write. Sam

[Hotel Mornings]

You have many strong sentences and images. Usually as a poem moves along, the structure and imagery begins to fail a little bit (which is something I consider to be my weakness), that is not the case with this poem. The lines: "Here so many quiet conversations//So many words and thoughts //Of future days that would not come
Of Time and Wishes for those to be left behind." really just make something inside of you drop. Very powerful.

[emmajoy]

A past life captured in today. How beautiful this is, and, how sad.

'Old man
Peering up to cloudless sky
Knowing what would be seen
The pulsing red sitting shoulder high
A silent greeting
A warm embrace

Old man
Time to go'

Quite, quite beautiful.. and tear making.

Thank you

[Debbie_Philly]

This is Beautiful..... brings such visions to mind and deep thoughts of life and death !!!

[Barbary Chaapel]

There's a poignancy here. The repetitive words add strength to the message of your poem, which is clear and concise in the language of aging.

Thank you for your recent comment on one of my poems.

[mysticgmekeepr]

I of course had no idea what it was about. It is a beautiful tribute to love and loss. I had the honor and the privilege of being very close to a group of families who lost their children to untimely deaths, most from chronic kidney disease. One of these kids was one of my greatest spiritual teachers and tho she has been gone now for 22 years I still have her picture in a frame right here next to me, and her love tucked into my heart like an envelope, sealed with her blessing and her kiss.
Lovely poem "Old man" and beautiful memories of a beautiful soul.

[mysticgmekeepr]

Life is a journey is it not? And the old walk and reflect and remember and ready themselves for parting.
I really enjoyed this walk and your old man.

[Sam Freeland]

Beautiful recollections of a life that has meant meaning. Life in any form is beautiful
and full of meaning. You recall as I do and the young will never fully appreciate this
until they find a way to last beyond sixty years. You have opened a door for them to
try...in my earlier years I heard tell of this aging discovery and thought it was just
wishfull thinking...fortunately I have lived to appreciate it. The form our words
take is entirely personal as long as it clearly comes from the heart...yours does
and to me that is great writing. All writng will benefit from this endeavor and new writers
should definitely take note...thank you for stimulating me to write this review. sam