Sleep
A Poem by
Obscured by the Shadows
Always
tired,
it's dragging
me down.
Never fully
awake,
I'm about to
drown.
It's hard to
remember,
it's constant
blur.
Feels like slow
motion,
but I can't be
sure.
I just need a
break,
a helping
hand.
A little bit of
sleep,
would be so
grand.
© 2016 Obscured by the Shadows
Featured Review
Very excellent portrayal of how depression can feel. I love the way this message is short & tight, no fanfare, but just enuf of the details to make it completely relatable. Sometimes poetic devices can distract, but your poem just goes straight in for the vivid view & no adornments. Love that. Works perfectly for this message.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much for the excellent review.
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I enjoyed the description. It's now 11pm here in India and so a perfect recipe before sleep.
well done.
Armin. ...
Posted 8 Years Ago
I enjoyed the description. It's now 11pm here in India and so a perfect recipe before sleep.
well done.
Armin. ...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
India is quite the distance from here, I have never been there, but have always wanted to visit.
8 Years Ago
you are always welcome.
Great emotion and flow. Short sweet and deep
great write
Posted 8 Years Ago
Great emotion and flow. Short sweet and deep
great write
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for reviewing all of my writing :D
8 Years Ago
Its great writing so thank you. I honestly can't stop reading it😃😃
8 Years Ago
Hurray! That brings me hope, haha. Not a lot of people read my poetry.
8 Years Ago
Don't lose hope, your poetry is raw and in that its true.
8 Years Ago
You are more than welcome😃😃😃
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Obscured by the Shadows Flagstaff, AZ
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