Sleep

Always tired, 

it's dragging me down. 

Never fully awake, 

I'm about to drown.

It's hard to remember, 

it's constant blur. 

Feels like slow motion, 

but I can't be sure. 

I just need a break,

 a helping hand. 

A little bit of sleep, 

would be so grand.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Very excellent portrayal of how depression can feel. I love the way this message is short & tight, no fanfare, but just enuf of the details to make it completely relatable. Sometimes poetic devices can distract, but your poem just goes straight in for the vivid view & no adornments. Love that. Works perfectly for this message.

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Thank you so much for the excellent review.

[Nisreen]

you are an angel with no sleep
i turn into a monster with no sleep

i like your soft tone

[hcarson]

I was drawn to this particular poem after reading your titles as for many years i have suffered insomnia (not as bad now) and you have totally captured how it feels...I'm guessing you were in the midst of bad sleep problems yourself when you wrote this to catch so completly. Well done you :)

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Sad to say that I haven't left there grasp as of yet, but I am dealing with the struggles as any one would.

[hcarson]

Total nightmare, i feel for you, unless u have suffered proper sleep isdues u really cant appreciate just hoe dibilitating it is..hope u manage to get out of it soon...i found night one a night helpful...if u take more than one a night lol

[Obscured by the Shadows]

I suppose I could try something along those lines, but I think I may have found a personal way that is much better, it is just unavailable to me currently because of my age.

[hcarson]

Hope u sleep soon....although maybe not coz you produce some good poems tired lol!!

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Truth be told, haha.

[Chidoriflower]

I am so bloody tired so when I saw this I thought, "well well isn't this fine and dandy." It's 2 in the morning and I can't sleep. I want a break, just a little bit of sleep is all I need. Thank you for sharing :3

[Sins]

There are so many different scenarios I can personally see this poem relating to. Other than actually being sleepy, that is. Exhaustion plays its part in many aspects of life, and I think you're able to nicely describe the effects it can have on a person. Never being fully awake, things being a constant blur, slow motion...Sometimes people just need a break from everything going on in their lives, and sleep is one of the few relievers to this.

C: Really liked it.

And, you know me,

I love you. Always. cx

[Obscured by the Shadows]

My love for you is as constant as the sun. If it ever burned out, it would be in a fiery passionate inferno. Thanks for reading, princess.

[Sami Khalil]

The stages of sleep and its deprivation in your flowing words. Bravo....................

[V]

I feel like this, too pretty often. Clear words and meaning.

[Rye]

Short and to the point, I can relate to this write a lot. I deal with insomnia.
I really like your style. You speak of truth. Not often you find that.
Awesome job.

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Thank you so much, I appreciate the feedback and review :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Short and simple yet so so good.
I loved it especially coz I can relate to this poem.
I hate that when you can't sleep, tossing and turning for hours isn't fun.
On the topic of sleep I need to go to bed now, but also this poem gave me an idea for another poem, so thanks, hopefully I still remember it by morning lol

[Obscured by the Shadows]

You're welcome.

[Inject Positivity]

Lovely write....Sometimes a little power nap can give us freshness and new energy to work and fight for another day....Short but i think it is a very well thought out work....Full ratings.....

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Thank you ever so much.

[Inject Positivity]

I take your thank yous in my heart....Its always my honour and pleasure my frnd....