Him

Heart thudding,

Blood rushing,

Stomach twists,

Head pounding…

 

My very soul seems to crack with joy,

As he whispers those three words,

I most desperately want to hear.

 

I love you.

Reviews

[FutureMrsJonas]

aww

[Bud]

I so few words you have captured what it feels like when a person is around another they are in love with. Excellent piece of poetic art! Keep up the Outstanding work, my friend!

Isn't it strange how sometimes peoples entire existence can depend on those three simple words?
I think you did really well on this one. It's short and effective.
I think you should write longer pieces, really flex that poetry muscle. :)
-ST

[Lilyonia]

Omg i love love love it a have the same thing happening to me

[William Usry]

I love short and sweet...especially when it hits as hard as this one. As usual, great work. The only thing I would change is "as he tells me"...you overlooked a great opportunity to use another phrase that would add even more color to this already fantastic piece. Bravo.