I didn't get your name

This is actually true I spent the entire day with someone and never asked her name

I saw you on the bustop

your yellow sundress flowing in the wind

your warm smile greeting every passerby

the curious look on your face as you saw my stare

the pounding of my heart in my ears as you made your way over to me to say hello

you were everything I'm not,your much braver than I we shared a day filled with laughter

stupid jokes and hand-holding,you made me into the man I always wanted to be

we walked miles and you listened intently as I revealed my whole world to you

my past mistakes and the ones yet to be made.

 

With the sun setting in the amber sky you said it's time to go

I begged without saying a word for you to stay

you looked at me with you blue-green eyes and silenced my pleas

I walked you to the busstop and watched you walk away and wave goodbye

As you rode out of my life I only then realized I never asked your name

 

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar,This is actually true I spent the entire day with someone and never asked her name

Reviews

[Steve Thompson]

Man, I like what you did. So many times in life you meet people, but for some odd reason, at least I know I do, you may not assume that it is important to ask for a name. When it is gone you think about askoing questions that you should of, but it is to late, good piece. It brougfht up a lot of past memories.

[Vesa Lee]

Inspiring.
Has a sort of Cinderella feel to it...
Nicely done.

[Flow]

That seems to happen alot making a connection that is only in that one moment and makes me wonder what if. Very nice write about a moment in time I like how you showed the vulnerble side of man when he encounters a woman. Nicely done.

[James Takeo Panton]

This is very sensitve and personal.....flows along nicely, and well-written write.....good work...

[Mariah]

omgoodness, i'm sorry. !
i have tears in my eyes.
beautiful write. !
it's amazing how strangers can touch your heart.

[justjenn_2u]

How bittersweet! You have a beautiful memory to hold onto from the chance encounter. I admire how well you were able to express your emotions in this one.

[Mr. Deft Diction]

Man, this is a nice piece. Sometimes we're just so taken aback by someone that we never get ourselves FULLY together. You not getting her name was probably meant to be that way, you know? You've been able to create a piece and the day will be in your memory for a long time to come.

Nice, nice write.

[Sexy Jones]

"we walked miles and you listened intently as I revealed my whole world to you"

I love this line.
I don't know why.

[Carrie Montgomery]

"you were everything I'm not,your much braver than I
I begged without saying a word for you to stay"
these two lines are very powerful, they really stand out. It is odd what a stranger can stir in us with just a smile or kind word. It is hard to undertsand why it is sometimes easier to be the person we "want to be" in an un-known person's presence.