My Heart

My heart cannot love you, you have broken it.
You have left in my chest only one little bit.
It's not nearly enough to give away love
To traitors, heart breakers, murderer of my dove.

It's too much numbing pain to bear
When you, your identity is destroyed without care
Even worse when you trusted him with your soul
And he stole it and crushed it, that was always his goal.

Now I seem to be dying, slowly, from inside
Black decay seeping in my blood, into my mind
Driving me insane, I'm always looking for escape
Hoping soon for rest to surround me like a black cape.

How could you? How could you hate me so much
To crush me, to kill, without even a touch
Besides all the ones that led me into your trap?
How could I? How could I think you could fix my heart's gaps?

Reviews

[J. A. Svercek]

I think you did a good job working in the rhyme scheme--that's more than can be said of a LOT of poets. You have the technical aspect down. However I think you have the potential for much, much more and I would suggest exploring free verse to see what you can come up with without the constraints of rhyme and metre. Good job with a usually overplayed theme.

Thanks for writing,
J.

[Cool Handless Luke]

That strikes a very severe chord. Unfortunately there are a lot of people who fall victim to such apathy. Very smooth rendition of revealing your heart while painting the "Killer." Very nicely done.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I love it...it doesnt feel good you have a broken heart...but thats life...and someday time will take away the pain...or so some people say.
Great Job

[mmzx]

this is just, wonderful.

[..R.I.P..]

This is amazing. I loved. You captured you pain well and put it out there for the world to see, I'm impressed.

[karmic]

I'am ashamed to say it, but the guy that your talking about, i also use to be that kind of person. I Also agree with jake about the rhyme scheme, you did a very good job on that and holding the entire message together.