Hopeless

There may have been songs,
There may have been dreams,
There may have been peace
like slow moving streams.

There may have been pain,
There may have been sadness,
There may have been confusion,
like a madman in madness.

There may have been fear,
There may have been bliss,
there may have been love,
at that very first kiss.

There could have been joy,
There could have been nightmares,
There could have been blood,
There was thousands of tears.

There may have been a lot of things,
of what there was or could have been,
but the times of love are behind us,
and will never be seen again.
There may have been...

Author's Note

Added a few things from the old one.

Reviews

[Loner]

U are a true writer.

[Livana Lowell]

I'm trying to figure out why you entitled this piece "Hopeless." I mean you're talking about what could have been, like the past and then the word "hopeless" seems like a future term rather. Could it be used as a way to show that in the past the narrator had been hopeless of such things the narrator dreams could have happened. Otherwise, it's awkward title.

In the second stanza, I felt a lack of feeling for some reason unless the poem is meant to be so blunt. If not, there should be more simlies like the one in the first stanza "like slow moving streams", which I thought a very strong comparison.

The last line is very vague and I don't know if you meant it to be like that. If so, keep it, but otherwise, it's confusing.

Anyways, I think this poem could be elborated and stronger because the dicition is quite dull, but I thank you for sharing.