I AM A BLAZING FIRE

I AM A BLAZING FIRE

A Poem by Shabeeh Haider

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                     I am a blazing fire,

                  You are a ball of snow.

         My flames have made you water

               And now you start to flow.

 

                 You pour onto the fire,

           And douse my flickering flame,

               You wipe out my existence,

               For you are not the same.

 

                 There is no blazing fire,

                There is no ball of snow.

            Just eyes that gaze at nothing

           And from them tear drops flow.

© 2016 Shabeeh Haider


Author's Note

Shabeeh Haider
From my book: PAPER BOATS

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There are many ways to describe how two things don't mix: "fire & ice" . . . "gasoline & match" . . . "oil & water" . . . but this is the most amazing & original way I've ever seen it described. This is so brilliantly described in vivid metaphor that is stretched to the moon & back. I could actually feel the way it feels to (1) snuff someone else out with my personality . . . and (2) be snuffed out myself by someone else's personality. It couldn't be more stark & permanent as you've described it here. Truly one of the best ideas I've seen in your writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Shabeeh Haider

7 Years Ago

Thank you for such wonderful and inspiring words.



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Very well written. Nice flow, Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Valentine.
Like this Shabeeh. A relationship that was just not meant to be. Maybe change the last line though. It seems to stop the flow of the poem.
Just eyes that gaze at nothing
Just tear drops left to flow



Posted 7 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

7 Years Ago

Exactly Paul. A relationship that was not meant to be.
Thank you for improving the last line.

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Writing poetry is my passion. I have been writing since I was 10 years of age. I love the poets of the Romantic Era and am very particular about rhyme, meter and balance. I have also written many Gha.. more..

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