I AM A BLAZING FIRE

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                     I am a blazing fire,

                  You are a ball of snow.

         My flames have made you water

               And now you start to flow.

 

                 You pour onto the fire,

           And douse my flickering flame,

               You wipe out my existence,

               For you are not the same.

 

                 There is no blazing fire,

                There is no ball of snow.

            Just eyes that gaze at nothing

           And from them tear drops flow.

Author's Note

From my book: PAPER BOATS

Reviews

[barleygirl]

There are many ways to describe how two things don't mix: "fire & ice" . . . "gasoline & match" . . . "oil & water" . . . but this is the most amazing & original way I've ever seen it described. This is so brilliantly described in vivid metaphor that is stretched to the moon & back. I could actually feel the way it feels to (1) snuff someone else out with my personality . . . and (2) be snuffed out myself by someone else's personality. It couldn't be more stark & permanent as you've described it here. Truly one of the best ideas I've seen in your writing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for such wonderful and inspiring words.

[Great Aunt Astri]

YEs, we do tend to obliterate people sometimes. The secret is just to get on with it. OR retribution, but I think that gets out of hand. MY husband always says 'Don't get mad, get even'. But I beg to disagree

[Shabeeh Haider]

I guess men will think differently and will try to "Get even".
Women tend to be more compassionate.
I appreciate your words and thank you for reading.

[Miss Sharon]

(eyes that gaze at nothing and from them tear drops flow.) A sad statement that I hope is not autobiographical. Nicely written my friend! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your kind words.
No, certainly not autobiographical.
I have been blessed and never have enough words to thank the Creator.

[Miss Sharon]

That makes two of us!! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

May you always be blessed

[Manu]

Kudos for this thought, Sir.
Fire and snow are never meant to be together.
At the end only void will be left.

Brilliant poem, sir.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Gorthi, thank you for stopping by and leaving your very valuable comment.
You Are so correct. When fire tries to embrace ice everything is lost.

[Bala Gorthi]

What a beautiful write Haider ji! Kudos to your creativity! I liked the irony of the fact.
It's metaphorical effect leaves one awestruck.
To lose existence in the hands of one's own creation can be painful or blissful depending upon the perspective. Those tear drops tell the agony..
Thank you for sharing this beautiful word craft...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Bala thank you for your wonderful review. At times you lose it all even after having succeeded.

[Bala Gorthi]

Very rightly said, Sir!

[emmajoy]

Chalk and cheese, night and day.. the coming and going, the ifs and but? There's a conflicting message in your finely expressed poem. The chemistry is near dangerous yet.. maybe the lack of armour on both sices isn't quite enough? Or on a second reading, is one sided.. but, which side?!

[Shabeeh Haider]

You do have very valid points. Lack of armour, lots of expectations and ultimately both end up losing what could have been a wonderful relationship.Thank you for your comment.

[emmajoy]

We readers interpret in such different ways. The first read can be enigmatic on one hand, obvious on another. One can overlook points, can be mislead about others. Your words are stark and obvious in some ways, In others they tear layers from Self and lay open for understanding.

[Lydia Shutter]

Delightful rhyming in this ultra-romantic write. Hints at deep emotion and sensuality. I liked it a lot. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you liked it Lydia. Thank you for your kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are a powerful hunter of perfection and beauty. You capture them with great ease....:)...................

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you so much Sami. I will cherish these words that you have conveyed.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:).................

[Lorry]

Perfectly captured Shabeeh. Reminiscent of dreams that could have been more and memories that alternative endings were written for but not used.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Certainly not the way a relationship should end. Thank you for your words.

[Tony Jordan]

It's more fuel that we need when we are aflame - someone who compliments and increases our glow as well as their own - not one who kils the flame.
Good metaphorical write Shabeeh

[Shabeeh Haider]

I agree Tony. Thank you for your review.

[Tony Jordan]

Welcome Shabeeh.