A HUNTER IN THE DARK

 

At night when half the world’s asleep,

And those awake, in sins rejoice,

 My eyes can see the darkest line,

 My ears can hear the faintest noise. 

 

I sit perched high up on a tree,

I watch her moves and bide my time,

And when she thinks that all is safe,

 I swoop down and complete my crime. 

 

I strike when she is least aware,

 My talons pierce deep in her flesh.

And when I suck out her life’s breath,

I’m born anew, I feel so fresh. 

 

I rule the world when it is dark,

 I do not need the sun and light.

 The darkness makes my hunger rise,

 I need to taste her flesh tonight.

Reviews

[Nina H.]

This is dark. An interesting read. Keeps you captivated from beginning to end. Well written, I imagined the whole scenario in my mind.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you found this interesting, Nina. Thank you for your review.

[Jeannette Medlock]

VAMPIRE!!!!!! I see a thirsty preying vampirrrrre!!!! Haha Good writing!! I may be wrong but I got vampire!!

Janet

[Shabeeh Haider]

You are not wrong Jeannette. Vampires lurk in human form as well

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

What a beautiful poem. Lovely descriptions. Rhythmic as always. Carries a dual meaning. I'll call it captivating and intoxicating- i could feel the things. That is how it is meant to be- poems are meant to be felt. Keep writing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Vatsal, thank you for your very kind review

[Miss Sharon]

Oooooh! This one makes my skin crawl. It would make a good Halloween card! Written with suspense and verve. ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sharon, thank you for your kind review.

[Miss Sharon]

You are quite welcome! Always a pleasure. ~Sharon

[1VJ]

A falconer's foray or something much more sinister, an obscure stalker taking flight. Imagery is stunningly dark.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Paloma, thank you for review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

eerie piece...there are those who are like night stalkers....they creep up in the shadows and attack the unaware...i see this more figuratively than literally...
nicely done...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Jacob and I guess it is more figurative than literal.

[Ardra]

The knight of dark .... Liked this one.... vampires being one of my favourite subjects :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Glad you liked it and very intriguing that vampires are your favourite subject.

[Ardra]

:) oh I love them lol.... twilight being a fav movie of mine...I haven't tried to write anything about them...lets see in future I will give a try :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

I guessed that Twilight impressed you. Good luck

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The utter concept of Vampires and Flesh-Eaters and all that we have read before in different books and seen in different movies have all nicely fitted within the boundary of your words. A good read, once again. Thank you for sharing!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Fahnida, thank you for reading and leaving such a beautiful review.

[Lydia Shutter]

Terrifying....vampire? Taste her flesh...YUCK! Suck out her life's breath? OMG....this one scares me, Shabeeh, but it is well written. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

I tried my hand at a different type of a poem. Thank you for the review.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh yes, it was quite different for you!

[Paul Bell]

Stealthily through the night, finding prey out of sight, quick death his delight. Dark write, i like it.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you like it Paul. Thank you for the review.