' I want to steal the tears you have, .. .. I want to take your grief. .. .. I stole your heart; I stole your sleep, .. .. I’ll always be your thief. '
Beautiful feelings plus great meter plus a warm font colour equals a wonderful poem for your love. Should be written on fine tissue and held with garlands of sweet scented flowers!
A unique love story. I've never had anyone steal my tears or grief, sounds like a grand gesture! Nicely composed.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Paloma. thank you. You may not have allowed anyone to steal your tears and grief.
8 Years Ago
You're probably correct, a personality imperfection I'm afraid, never cared to share, along with bei.. read moreYou're probably correct, a personality imperfection I'm afraid, never cared to share, along with being extremely impatient. Might have to do with the self-indulgent environment I grew up in, or I was just born that way. I try everyday to overcome those character flaws, well, most days anyway. :)
Whoa, that is amazing and pretty romantic. This is a nice perspective towards love and affection. This one has a peculiar musical effect and is quite deep in terms of the beauty of language and the beauty of emotion. Excellently penned. Keep writing.
This is just stunningly beautiful my friend. Such a unique perspective on a subject we all know so much, as well as so little about. Summed up perfectly, without a single word wasted or out of place....Superb write.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Nemo, I am humbled and delighted by your very kind words.
Cute and sweet one :) ... I’m stealing minutes from your life,
Though often they are brief. But those minutes hold more worth than the remaining hours ...thanks for sharing
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Indeed Ria, those minutes are worth more than the rest of our lives. Thank you for your review.
' I want to steal the tears you have, .. .. I want to take your grief. .. .. I stole your heart; I stole your sleep, .. .. I’ll always be your thief. '
Beautiful feelings plus great meter plus a warm font colour equals a wonderful poem for your love. Should be written on fine tissue and held with garlands of sweet scented flowers!
I think this message might have been intended as a playful one, despite the negative statement of positive feelings. However, it reminds me of the way some of us always feel inferior, like we don't deserve a full-on gift of love or attention, like every little bit we get is stolen, rather than wholeheartedly given. To me, this is a sad message, despite the possibly playful intent. Maybe it's hitting too close to the overall journey I've walked in this life.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
This was indeed written with with a bit of playful intent but I can understand your point of view as.. read moreThis was indeed written with with a bit of playful intent but I can understand your point of view as well. Thank you for expressing your point of view.
Writing poetry is my passion. I have been writing since I was 10 years of age. I love the poets of the Romantic Era and am very particular about rhyme, meter and balance.
I have also written many Gha.. more..