IF LOVE WAS ALL....

If love was all, I'd be the wall,
That stops the storm that hits your shore.
I'd let no trouble reach your door.
I'd block the pain that comes your way,
And in my shade, you'll safely stay.
Each time you stumble, grab this wall,
I'll see to it, you will not fall.
If love was all...

I'd be the tree with branches spread,
No rain or snow would touch your head.
The winds of sorrow, sleets of pain,
Would never touch your life again.
Should trouble come, give me a call,
And in my arms you will not fall.
If love was all...

Your sorrow and your tears, I'll buy,
And everything that makes you cry.
And in exchange, with you would be,
All smiles and laughter, life gave me.
The joys I have, please take them all,
The days you live should be a ball.
If love was all...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm usually not very wild about love poems, becuz they all sound the same with common clichés . . . that being said, this is the rare delightful surprise! I love this message! It's so original & lyrical & imaginative. I love the way the narrator conveys such confidence & protection, which is so hard to find in my experience. So often, people write about love and it's all about "self" -- what the beloved makes the narrator feel. But I love that your message is mainly about the other person, what the narrator would do to be a good loving friend & companion. I also love the analogies you chose (wall & tree) -- it's great the way you carried the imagery thru each of the stanzas with clarity & consistency. This is one of the best poems of yours that I've read so far.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Barleygirl, thank you for your very encouraging words

[GalaxyGhost]

Such a touching poem and I am really in love with it! It is so sincere and I love the metaphor to the wall that the sign of protection and it's really cool that you have it there.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Galaxy, thank you for such sweet words

[AliciaB]

This is beautiful. I love the tone of protection and giving throughout. The rhyme scheme is also lovely - I am very impressed by the way you set this up and wove everything so seamlessly together. Nothing forced at all. And the repetition of the title as the final line of each stanza is the perfect touch. Nice work!

[stargirl23]

This is such a beautiful write, keep it up!

[James]

This was lovely, your rhyming is alway perfect and never forced. I love the way this just flows, it's a beautiful read.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your kind words, James

[Akshita]

What a poem!! When will I be able to write a poem half as good as this?

[Shabeeh Haider]

Akshita, I am sure you will write better than this.

[Miss Sharon]

This is very beautifully written! You have captured the true essence of a deep and lasting love. Bravissimo! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sharon, thank you for your kind words

[Miss Sharon]

Most welcome my friend! ~SP