IF LOVE WAS ALL....

If love was all, I'd be the wall,
That stops the storm that hits your shore.
I'd let no trouble reach your door.
I'd block the pain that comes your way,
And in my shade, you'll safely stay.
Each time you stumble, grab this wall,
I'll see to it, you will not fall.
If love was all...

I'd be the tree with branches spread,
No rain or snow would touch your head.
The winds of sorrow, sleets of pain,
Would never touch your life again.
Should trouble come, give me a call,
And in my arms you will not fall.
If love was all...

Your sorrow and your tears, I'll buy,
And everything that makes you cry.
And in exchange, with you would be,
All smiles and laughter, life gave me.
The joys I have, please take them all,
The days you live should be a ball.
If love was all...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm usually not very wild about love poems, becuz they all sound the same with common clichés . . . that being said, this is the rare delightful surprise! I love this message! It's so original & lyrical & imaginative. I love the way the narrator conveys such confidence & protection, which is so hard to find in my experience. So often, people write about love and it's all about "self" -- what the beloved makes the narrator feel. But I love that your message is mainly about the other person, what the narrator would do to be a good loving friend & companion. I also love the analogies you chose (wall & tree) -- it's great the way you carried the imagery thru each of the stanzas with clarity & consistency. This is one of the best poems of yours that I've read so far.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Barleygirl, thank you for your very encouraging words

[Tony Jordan]

The wish to see them never harmed - that you would sacrifice yourself for their unending happiness - 'Greater love has no one than this, than to lay down one's life for his friend' - came to mind.
I really like how you employed the refrain so skillfully making for a smooth transition through the piece.
Another superb write Shabeeh

[Shabeeh Haider]

That is what love is all about. Thank you for your kind words my friend.

[Tony Jordan]

So true.
Welcome Shabeeh
:)

[Anindita Janhabee]

If love was all...
for some definitely it is... for others it isn't....
who doesn't want to get such a person as love ? Definitely me too...
Well, it's charming how you wrote the poem rhyming and shining ....
Was great time reading this........
emotions flowing all around...
Nice one : )
Anindita😃

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Anindita. I'm glad you found the shine in this poem.

[Anindita Janhabee]

It's my pleasure sir...

[Diane]

Well, that's exactly how I would explain unconditional love! The wording is perfect.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Glad you found the wordings perfect.
Thank you for your kind words.

[Sonal Kohli]

Love shown in words....at its best
Nice work :-)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Sonal. :)

[Fahmida Mehreen]

When we learn that we can love unconditionally, selflessly, without fearing that a loss can tear us apart, we know that we have the true heart to love. Otherwise, as we love and watch out to keep our love safe, we end up losing the love itself.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am humbled beyond words. Thank you for taking the time to go through my work and for adding your valuable feedback.

[Woody]

Haider, you are the master of love poetry, hands down!! do I need to say more?

[Shabeeh Haider]

Woody, thank you for such a kind review

[Sheila Kline]

Your words of commitment, and devotion are those that give cause for one to believe in the power of love; and in perfect form!
Yes, if love was all...!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sheila, than you for your kind review.

[Wolf_Lord]

If love was all indeed... This is more than just a poem... It is a tribute to your love and to the person it is intended for... They must be very special. Your rhythm and meter are spot on. The emotional content of this is so expressive and beautifully expressed... That is one lucky person... I am blessed with having a love like this myself... Going on 8 years... I really enjoyed this.
Wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

[Shabeeh Haider]

Wolf, thank you for your kind words. I am glad that you have this kind of love.

[zunie frost]

It reminds of a poem i wrote "is love the only thing ?" . I don't know if you have read it or not any way i love your work a lot .and this one is really speacial . It really touches my heart
But your words are much better and flow is really great it kept me reading .

[Shabeeh Haider]

I will check if I have read your poem or not. Thank you fit reviewing

[zunie frost]

Welcome i really am your biggest faan . I'll visit more of your work soon

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am honoured