A LOVE SUPREME

 

The stars bow down and kiss the ground,

They line the grass where lovers lie,

And flowers that bloomed on this Earth,

Fill vacant slots up in the sky.

 

The angels spread their golden wings,

And take them in a sweet embrace.

The gentle waves lap at the shore,

The planets swoon in outer space.

 

The moment where the sun meets moon,

As Cupids arrow meets its mark,

All time comes to a grinding halt,

Between the best of Light and Dark.

 

The moans of lust, the groans of love,

Are music of this timeless song.

Apollo plays his magic harp,

As all in Heaven dance along.

 

The time comes for that final roar,

The mighty waves hit at the shore.

For all is calm now, all is peace,

Love goes to sleep, it wants not more.

Reviews

[Bear]

The temperature in the room went up as I read this, very passionate and moving. You did a great job of expressing the emotional and spirituality involved in this relationship and the title is perfect, well done my friend. Five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Bear, thank you for your kind words

[Akshita]

Beautiful poem! I love it!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Akshita, thank you for reviewing it

[Lyn Anderson]

A rather beautiful description of making love. I guess the Mature Ratings police don't go after this type of poem. I am envious of your ability to write suggestive poetry that is not flagged.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I did try to camouflage the description with the hope that the young readers would not really understand the exact thought that I am conveying.
Thank you, Goode for taking time to review my poem.

[Amber Lily]

Aw, this just made me feel a little glow on the inside. A very beautiful poem that reminds you of the good things in life. Life and love, that is what we need to survive. Great work :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Amber. Life and love together is what we all need.

[iamshadowine]

this is so good!i love it!
keep writing :D

[Shabeeh Haider]

Shadowine, I am glad you enjoyed it.

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Wow, this poem is tight. As I read it, I could imagine someone reciting it out loud. Wonderful use of description. Thanks for sharing it. N.

[Shabeeh Haider]

N, thank you for reading and reviewing

[Anindita Janhabee]

wow... sir.. it's really amazing to read.. all the words used here absolutely grabbed all my attention towards it.. I am really interested in this piece. I always want to write such a beautiful piece with such special and unique words.. but I had never done that, I am still trying for it, but honestly, I loved this piece... all the striking emotions tell a true love story within this poem... very well penned sir..
A sincere request from this 15 yr old, please keep on writing like this, they bloom a lot in my garden..... : )
Anindita : )

[Shabeeh Haider]

Anindita, I am flattered by your very sweet review. It is good to know that a 15 year old can understand the intensity of my words.
I am glad you enjoyed reading this. Thank you

[Anindita Janhabee]

was my pleasure sir...

[Sami Khalil]

A soaring write with great imagery and power of emotions...:)........................

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sami, thank you so much for your kind words

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. .....:)))))

[Jacob Clifford]

A simple love story with a bit of grandeur thrown in. The cosmic scale added something to this poem that similar pieces don't have.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Clifford, thank you for your kind review