A LOVE SUPREME

 

The stars bow down and kiss the ground,

They line the grass where lovers lie,

And flowers that bloomed on this Earth,

Fill vacant slots up in the sky.

 

The angels spread their golden wings,

And take them in a sweet embrace.

The gentle waves lap at the shore,

The planets swoon in outer space.

 

The moment where the sun meets moon,

As Cupids arrow meets its mark,

All time comes to a grinding halt,

Between the best of Light and Dark.

 

The moans of lust, the groans of love,

Are music of this timeless song.

Apollo plays his magic harp,

As all in Heaven dance along.

 

The time comes for that final roar,

The mighty waves hit at the shore.

For all is calm now, all is peace,

Love goes to sleep, it wants not more.

Reviews

[Bear]

The temperature in the room went up as I read this, very passionate and moving. You did a great job of expressing the emotional and spirituality involved in this relationship and the title is perfect, well done my friend. Five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Bear, thank you for your kind words

[Paul Bell]

Nice to see we're still in love with love.
Not enough going round in this doom and gloom world. You been taking a break.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Paul, hopefully we will always be in love with love.
Thank you for the review.
Had been a bit busy this month.

[Tony Jordan]

Very deftly penned Shabeeh.
Excellent metaphor. A beautifully told tale with wonderful pacing.
Very enjoyable my friend.
:)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Glad you enjoyed it, Tony

[Alisa Js]

This one to me sounded like a beautiful lullaby from the soul... straight to the heart.

Well done,

Alisa

[Shabeeh Haider]

Alisa, I'm glad it felt that way. Thank you for your generous reviews.

[Treason and Metal]

Wow.. A really good one.. Not really into the love last genre but this one hot me thinking about so many ways I could manipulate my words.. Could you perhaps review for me??would be mighty appreciated.. Thank you

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your kind words. I will certainly review your writing

[barleygirl]

WOW! WOW! And WOW! This is the best love/lust poem I've read in awhile. I love the imaginary beginning, the way you describe how all the heavens are involved, stars trading places with flowers, so imaginative & creative are your thoughts & manner of expressing sheer delight when love & lust are combined into a powerful thrust. Then your poem gradually shifts into a more "apparent" mode, where we are transported from the heavens to the sensory delights at hand. I love the way you describe things in a sexy suggestive manner, rather than a blatant sleazy manner. This is my favorite level of sensuality in a sexy message. You've knocked it out of the park with this one!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Love combined with lust is indeed a heavenly delight and I tried to portray that impression. It is so much more than fulfilling a blatant need. Thank you for your very generous words.

[manisha]

Resplendent.... you created a magical love world. Well done

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you, Manisha for your kind words

[aLittlePain]

What a richly descriptive image of love/love making. There's a peaceful flow in the way you've woven your words, that I deeply admire.

Stunning poetry. Rach x

[Shabeeh Haider]

Rach, thank you for your very kind words.

[richieb]

A very good poem using the strong imagery of nature to express the feelings of love. A gentle flowing write full of peace and tranquility. Our world certainly can use the expressions you have created. Nice work, I enjoyed it very much.
Richie b.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Richieb, thank you so much for your encouraging words.

[Ananya]

Beautiful rendition... beautifully done...the way you represent it all....skillfully done. I don't know how to say what it made me feel. I did not cry and I could not smile. It just left me speechless.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Ananya, your review has left me speechless.

[Firemay]

Wow, that was amazing and i have to admit it would make a lovely song.
Well Done.

[Shabeeh Haider]

You really seem to be in to songs. Thank you for reading and reviewing

[Firemay]

Well, songs are music and writing together so... yeah.. I love music and as you may already know, i am really passionate about writing. I mostly like reviewing poems because they seem like lyrics to me.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I guess you are right. Add music to the poetry and you have a song.