COME LET US MAKE A WISH

So much hatred everywhere

Come let us make a wish,

While gazing at the stars,

It’s time to end the hate,

It’s time to heal the scars.

 

The Earth is big enough,

For all to live with love,

We swim in the same sea,

We share the sky above.

 

The same things make us smile,

We all feel the same pain.

One sun shines on us all,

The same clouds send us rain.

 

Come let us live in peace,

Let us give love a try.

We don’t have much time here

For soon we will all die.

 

It’s time to end the hate,

It’s time to heal the scars.

Come let us make a wish,

While gazing at the stars.

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This is a lovely poem. You incorporate many different elements - the air and sea, weather, the experiences of joy and pain, the stars - that unite us as human beings. No matter who/where/when we are, we all experiences these things. I also like the lines "We don’t have much time here / For soon we will all die" - a bit dark, perhaps, but not in a gruesome way. It's the stark realization of our own mortality, which is another characteristic we all share, and something that should motivate us to work for change before our time is up. Finally, I really like how you repeat the first stanza at the end of the poem with the lines switched up. It adds a nice sense of cohesiveness, and I love the image of "gazing at the stars." Overall, very well done. Great work!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Alicia. this is a wonderful review. Thank you for taking the time to read this poem

[Miss Sharon]

FANTASTIC write! I love everything about this. The beautiful 6 meter lines with the B,D rhyme scheme is spot on in every conceivable way. Poetic prosody at its best! And yes...it is worth a second read AND a second review! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sharon, thank you once again for such wonderful words

[Raylene]

A poem I hope comes true you have captured how maybe one day we all can live in peace I love the start how you say let's all make a wish because as a child we are told if you wish it it can come true

[Shabeeh Haider]

It would be great if we could live in live in peace. Thank you for your words, Raylene

[Raylene]

My pleasure my dear friend

[Ardra]

Very deep and profound words.....for world peace and peace in society in our own personal life.... it's always good to choose love over hate.....we don't have an eternity in our hands....I like the part of wishing looking at the stars

[Shabeeh Haider]

Ria, thank you for your kind words

[stargirl23]

I love the way the lines flow in this!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Adi for your kind words

[Amber Lily]

Very meaningful and pretty. We as the human race really need to turn this world around, but we are often too worried about our pay checks to do anything about it. Every little bit counts, because it helps create change. Well done! :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Amber, you have said it so well. Thank you for your review

[Carolynn]

This is a beautiful plea to end hate and heal the earth's scars - this topic is dear to my heart and I have the same wish so all I can say is bravo - well done!! and I hope this message spreads like a wildfire :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Most of us have this wish. Let us hope and pray for the best. Thank you for your review.

[Lydia Shutter]

A beautiful poem....like a hug for the world. If only this would happen....if only. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

If only..... Thank you, Lydia.

[Miss Sharon]

A beautiful poem very well written. And on...only if it could be so! There are some who smile while beheading a person. Such a cruel world in which we live. ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

It is indeed very sad when you witness how cruel man can be.
Thank you for your review

[Miss Sharon]

Indeed my friend. You are most welcome for the review. I enjoy reading your work! ~SP

[Shannon]

Sometimes the hate is met with anger, frustration or melodramatic lament. This one is so simply and wonderfully states. A cross between a plea and a statement of fact. I also love the book ended, reorganized first and last stanzas.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you S. Mi for your kind words

[Woody]

lovely, Haider. your own version of Lennon's Imagine. beautiful. I whole-heartedly embrace it.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Woody for your kind words