O HIDE ME MY LOVE

O hide me my love, in the depth of your gaze,

In the warmth of your arms for the rest of my days.

 

O keep me my love, in the dreams in your eyes.

In the tears that you shed, in your smiles and your sighs.

 

O show me my love, all the thoughts that reside

In the vault of your heart, where they silently hide.

 

O find me my love, in the words you don’t speak,

In the grin on your lips, in the blush on your cheek.

 

 

O give me my love, all the love you can send,

That will stay in my heart till the days of life end.

 

 

O take me my love, take my soul and my heart,

And heal the past wounds, never tear me apart.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Rhymes perfectly....
excellent...
each line describing a unique feeling,
each word having its own meaning...
this is something called true love,
it's never going to fade even if you are made apart.....
beautiful flow, I could add some tune and sing it inside my mind.....
one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read.... good job!!!
Anindita

[Shabeeh Haider]

Anindita, with such encouraging words, I can only hope to get better. Thank you for such a lovely review

[Anindita Janhabee]

I am still singing the verse..I am totally lost..can I be a bit personal to ask u whether it was a real experience or a fiction...

[Shabeeh Haider]

All my poetry is derived from real life experiences.
Some are mine, some are others.
You have a sweet and unique name. What does it mean?

[Anindita Janhabee]

Anindita means faultless and Janhabee means a holy river gangaa or as precious as life....

[Shabeeh Haider]

That is sweet. I hope you live up to your name.

[Anindita Janhabee]

hope so..thank you..

[thetish]

Lovely in every way. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

thetish, thank you for dropping by

[barleygirl]

This is a very gracefully stated plea . . . covering all the things everyone longs for in a loving situation . . . and in this way, you've captured feelings very relatable to all. I love your stilted Shakespearean style language -- usually I don't, but in this case I do, becuz the phrases are not all twisted around & pompous sounding. Instead, your desires are written in straightforward pleas, easy to follow, even with the slightly elevated language. I'm afraid this doesn't really strike me as being so true-to-life, however, I think love in today's world looks quite a bit different than this. But it's comforting to harken back to a more romantic time.

[Shabeeh Haider]

You might be right. Love in todays world looks quite different. Thank you for your review

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Love the plea at the end of "never tear me apart". It is something we should all ask when giving our soul to someone else because it makes us vulnerable. Love this wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing. Laters, N.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your sweet words

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

You write in the language of the commons and this is the best point about your writing.
This poem tells us of your very deep love for the girl.
Your poems are always so full of emotion that they make the readers lose themselves in thoughts arising deep within from the mind- from the heart. So lovely. Keep writing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for these wonderful words which I will always cherish

[zunie frost]

I really love the simpilicity in your poem ... very beautiful work ...
As i am your fan i must say that you are awsome ...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Zunie, thank you for your kind words

[zunie frost]

Welcome

[Usman Muhammad]

A very nice and beautiful poem.
The flow of the poem is very enchanting.
You have have done amazingly well in describing what is love and how strong is its power.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you, Usman for your very kind words

[Cobblestone Traveler]

This is so sweet and tender. Beautiful display of intense feelings of love. This couple is strong and woven together in a powerful deep connection. Great job!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you so much

[gabrielle]

This is very delightful couplet, Shabeeh! Also, i noted that the meter of the piece is consistent towards the end. The consistent format speaks so well of how disciplined you are as a poet/writer. I enjoyed this immensely.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Gabrielle for your very kind words

[Firemay]

This is a very sweet poem and it has a nice rhythm to it i..
well done!!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Firemay

[GalaxyGhost]

This is such a beautiful poem that it kinda gave me chills. It's sweet and happy, almost quite daydreamy. It's an amazing poem!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Galaxy, thank you for your very kind words