O HIDE ME MY LOVE

O hide me my love, in the depth of your gaze,

In the warmth of your arms for the rest of my days.

 

O keep me my love, in the dreams in your eyes.

In the tears that you shed, in your smiles and your sighs.

 

O show me my love, all the thoughts that reside

In the vault of your heart, where they silently hide.

 

O find me my love, in the words you don’t speak,

In the grin on your lips, in the blush on your cheek.

 

 

O give me my love, all the love you can send,

That will stay in my heart till the days of life end.

 

 

O take me my love, take my soul and my heart,

And heal the past wounds, never tear me apart.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Rhymes perfectly....
excellent...
each line describing a unique feeling,
each word having its own meaning...
this is something called true love,
it's never going to fade even if you are made apart.....
beautiful flow, I could add some tune and sing it inside my mind.....
one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read.... good job!!!
Anindita

[Shabeeh Haider]

Anindita, with such encouraging words, I can only hope to get better. Thank you for such a lovely review

[Anindita Janhabee]

I am still singing the verse..I am totally lost..can I be a bit personal to ask u whether it was a real experience or a fiction...

[Shabeeh Haider]

All my poetry is derived from real life experiences.
Some are mine, some are others.
You have a sweet and unique name. What does it mean?

[Anindita Janhabee]

Anindita means faultless and Janhabee means a holy river gangaa or as precious as life....

[Shabeeh Haider]

That is sweet. I hope you live up to your name.

[Anindita Janhabee]

hope so..thank you..

[Anindita Janhabee]

Sir, this is my second review for this poem. Fact is that, this piece has entered deep into my heart and I just can't stop reading this frequently. Again, for the appreciation, it feels wonderful as how such kind of love still does exist in this hostile world. Excellent dedication...
Every time I read this, a sense of humanity evokes from my soul... I just can't describe all that I feel after reading this poem. Some writings always sound pleasant and beautiful, no matter how many times you read it...
keep writing such great poems...
warm wishes
Anindita : )

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am so glad this poem has a place in your heart. Anindita, it is wonderful to be reviewed twice for the same poem

[aLittlePain]

This is just lovely! Has a euphoric dreamy feel about it.
As always your rhymes are incredibly precise and the repetition adds to the mood.

Ngā mihi maioha
Rach

[Shabeeh Haider]

Rach, thank you for your very kind words.
Stay blessed.

[Riti Rajput]

Lovely Poem... Beautifully written...
Your love is rhymed so beautifully here...
:) :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Riti for your kind words

[Carolynn]

This one reads so fluently and the romance of it just oozes off the page :) very nicely done!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Carolyn, thank you for these sweet words

[manisha]

Nice poem with lovely feelings. flow was perfect.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Manisha, thank you

[Amber Lily]

A sweet lovely write that is full of passion. This poem had one main theme throughout, and passion was felt within every line. Great work :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Amber, thank you for your kind review

[William Liston]

Shabeeh, I applaud your skills in rhythm and metre. The only rhythms I can use are iambic and trochaic. I love this poem. From both a technical aspect and an emotional one, it was great.

[Shabeeh Haider]

William, you are so much better than me when I was you age. You are going to be the best with time.

[Emily]

Wonderful poem!
Keep it up!!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Emily

[stargirl23]

This was lovely, especially with the repetition and the way the poem flowed, great job

[Shabeeh Haider]

thank you Adi