I WANTED A DROP

I wanted a drop you, sent me the sea,

I asked for a leaf, you gave me the tree.

I asked for some hope, you sent me a dream,

To bathe in your love, you sent me a stream.

 

I asked for a rose, you showed me your smile,

I took a small step, you moved back a mile.

I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,

I wanted to write, you sent me the pain.

Reviews

[zunie frost]

You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah

[Usman Muhammad]

Your ending line looked like a punch line to me.
I liked your poem very very much,
It is true that writing comes from pain and regret, it becomes powerful when it passes through these
factors. My first ever story is about a writer who writes because of the pain he is going through. Regret is the powerful tool he has to fill soul in his writing.
Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Usman, It is true that pain is a very strong stimulus and adds a lot of "feeling" to the words that we convey.
I will read your story about the writer. Hope I can find it here.
Thank you for your kind words.

[Emily]

Cute poem!!
Keep on writing!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you, Emily

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

The whole this is great, but loved the last line the most. What writer cannot understand that? Great write!

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for taking time to read and review.

[Sheila Kline]

Your first stanza clearly speaks of the great love that has been given, more than expected, enough to sustain one for eons but then in the second stanza a striking difference is presented as love was indeed given but with it came a price that has been paid with angst. Rain cleanses but cannot fill in the deep furrows created when one steps back to such a distance. And now to write of is all one can do, but the memory is there!
Lovely words birthed from the experience of loving and losing that love!
I too find that it is the pain in life that gives me cause more often than the happiness......yes, pain that splits the soul cannot be discarded without expressing it in some way!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your very enlightening words. I am glad you could understand the essence of these lines

[Gray]

Just stopping by to say I liked this for all the reasons mentioned. Nice poem.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Chris

[Kuro]

Ah so good to come back after a while and read a new poem by Shabeeh Haider. I will share this, it is really good. "I wanted to write, you sent me the pain." - this begs the question is experiencing pain necessary to be a writer. "I took a small step, you moved back a mile." Was your step away from her/him/it or toward her/him/it?

[Shabeeh Haider]

Nice to see you again, Haider. Many people write poetry because their heart is heavy and hurt. This is just one of the stimulus, there are many other reasons.

[Wolf_Lord]

Exquisite: Your words and meanings leap from the page... Thank you for sharing this. Wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Wolf for your kind review

[thetish]

Lovely words. Thank you for sharing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

thank you for your words

[William Liston]

This is a very good poem. I love how you maintained an intensity throughout the piece while still having an impactful last line.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you William for your kind words

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, I absolutely loved this poem! The juxtaposition of small and large, of near and far, of damp and deluge.....it is so effective. The rhyming is superb and the words flow so well. Yes, there are times pain gives us the inspiration to write, but more often it is happiness and romance for me. This is one of your best writes. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

Lydia, I am happy you liked it. You are right, happiness and love are strong factors that make you write but for me, pain makes the pen flow.
Thank you for taking the time to review this poem