I WANTED A DROP

I WANTED A DROP

A Poem by Shabeeh Haider


I wanted a drop you, sent me the sea,

I asked for a leaf, you gave me the tree.

I asked for some hope, you sent me a dream,

To bathe in your love, you sent me a stream.

 

I asked for a rose, you showed me your smile,

I took a small step, you moved back a mile.

I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,

I wanted to write, you sent me the pain.

© 2017 Shabeeh Haider


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You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah



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This is fabulous! Very well written with very much to think about. This one touches me deeply. ~Sharon

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Sharon, thank you for your words
Miss Sharon

8 Years Ago

You are quite welcome my friend! ~SP
I loved this and the gradual progression to the hurt in the last line!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

thank you Adi for your kind words
Love your style of writing, I loved reading this poem, the contrast near the end is amazing.

Well done :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much
The simple rhythm adds depth to the words.
Good read. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Fahmida, thank you
wow. that's what i have to this poem. That's Amazing.
I loved how you connected everything.
I can't even describe what i liked. It just woed me.
Great job! Well Done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Firemay, Thank you for such a wonderful review
This is wonderful, each line casts its own imagery. You have a gift and by using it as well as are you will be Blessed more and continue to be fruitful. I look forward to reading more of your gems.
Peace & Prayers,
Richie B.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Richie, thank you for your very kind words
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Gee
Everything you wished given, then taken back when greener grass beckoned. Last line is a gem. Nice writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Thank you Gee. You have summed it up well
You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah
A straight forward announcement of telling emotion, well done, good read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Thank you Thomas
wow! just amazing! the use of the simplest words in such an amazing manner! hats off! loved this piece and these lines were just the best
"I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,
I wanted to write, you sent me the pain."
LOVELY! keep writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shabeeh Haider

8 Years Ago

Thank you Shadowine, for your kind words. So nice to meet you here

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Writing poetry is my passion. I have been writing since I was 10 years of age. I love the poets of the Romantic Era and am very particular about rhyme, meter and balance. I have also written many Gha.. more..

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