I WANTED A DROP

I wanted a drop you, sent me the sea,

I asked for a leaf, you gave me the tree.

I asked for some hope, you sent me a dream,

To bathe in your love, you sent me a stream.

 

I asked for a rose, you showed me your smile,

I took a small step, you moved back a mile.

I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,

I wanted to write, you sent me the pain.

Reviews

[zunie frost]

You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wonderfully expressive phrases.
Relatable as well.
When you wish for something good, you always get the best.

Well structured!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Tazeen, thank you for your insight and your kind words

[emmajoy]

Such gently chosen words, such finely phrased threads of thought. In all honesty, having read your poem twice, still can't decide if you're talking of a love.. or of the love of poetry. Maybe tis both.. one to honour the other. Whatever, why ever.. this is more than worthy of a third read, Shabeeh!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Such wonderful words from you Emmajoy. Thank you for this honor.
Yes, it is a little both of both.

[Farmgirl]

Very beautiful..............

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Farmgirl

[Bala Gorthi]

What a way to thank our pain giver Sir!
I took a small step, you moved a mile back, some people do this, Haider Ji, I loved the paradox And anti paradox you have brought out in some of the verses. I wanted to write, you gave the pain. It says all.
A strong emotion brought out using light and very touching verses! An amazing one for me, Sir. Thank you for sharing..

[Shabeeh Haider]

Bala, thank you for taking the time to stop by.

[Paul Bell]

Great poem Shabeeh. Especially the last line.
Only through pain can you write the story.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Paul, thank you for your kind words.

[Ardra]

I like the line I took a small step...you moved back a mile.... I wanted to write you sent me pain.... :) guess whatever we asked for we got ....our final wish to write always stays granted :) ....each word of yours hold true..

[Shabeeh Haider]

Yes, Ria. That's what you had reviewed in an earlier poem (the pain keeps the writers alive). Guess we poets share the same thoughts.
I appreciate you taking the time to go through my poetry.

[Raylene]

very powerful my dear as I read your work I always feel the emotion in them which is a great trait the structure needs work though. I have come to expect very powerful emotional messages from you, I hope i will continue to see that as i do here we all write what we feel it is our muse it is the ink in our wells if we did not have something to move us we would not have anything to write about.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Raylene, You have said it so well. it is the ink in our wells and if we did not have something to move us, we could not write. It makes me so happy when the reader can feel the emotions that I had gone through in writing my poems. Thank you for your support

[Raylene]

Anytime dear if I may call you that I support all writers

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sweet of you

[M. L. F.]

We have a lot in common, it would seem. I enjoyed this piece. You actually pay attention to the rhythm of your writing. This piece was great.
...Misty

[Shabeeh Haider]

Misty, Rhyme and rhythm is most important for me. I will look up your writing. Nice to have things common with a fellow writer.

[M. L. F.]

I am in complete agreement with you there.. If you read it aloud and it sounds awful, go back and do it again... ;) And yes, fellow writers are allies. :) Nice to meet you..

[Shabeeh Haider]

The pleasure is mine

[wisemorie]

I like this you really have a talent for writing. The simplicity of this is easy for anyone to understand.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your kind words, wisemorie

[wisemorie]

You're welcome

[Anindita Janhabee]

it's really awesome... usually my writings are of this type.. and I believe, the only good thing about pain is it produces excellent poetry... I know, about your writings - they are sometimes yours and sometimes others' experiences... I truly am mad for your poems...they inspire a lot... and mostly touch my heart cause most of the time they are related to me... keep writing the best ones...
Anindita

[Shabeeh Haider]

Your words mean a lot Anindita. I am glad my poetry inspires you and touches your heart.
Your poetry has a tinge of sadness and that is why you can relate to my work.