SEASONS

Can seasons be ruled by your mood? 

You laugh at times, at times you brood. 

Your loving look makes flowers bloom, 

One smile from you drives away gloom.

 Each time a tear falls from your eye,

 Black clouds appear, the heavens’ cry.

 You turn away and autumn’s here, 

The garden’s bare, leaves disappear. 

Your soft caress has made me greet,

 In cold December, summer’s heat.

Reviews

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful poem.
Love is a strong emotion, it is as strong as to drive the life.
Well penned piece. Lovely.

PS: I feel that the exclamation mark at the end is kind of ruining the otherwise beautiful, serene flow. Maybe one can be removed for better effect.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for you very lovely review. I do agree with you about the exclamation mark. I don't remember how it got there. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are very welcome. I enjoy your work.

[Jeannette Medlock]

Beautiful! Perfect poem . One of the best I have read today I must say 👍

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your very kind words, Jeannette

[Jeannette Medlock]

Your welcome!

[Ruth]

Ah, clever :) I believe a mood can indeed alter a season with such in mind...to adore is to know such ebbs and flows...lovely :)

[aLittlePain]

A delightful take on self and changing seasons....to each a season!
Solid rhymes!

Beautiful and quaint x

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your very kind words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, my mood is effective by how the seasons treat me, well done, good read.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thomas, thank you so much for your review

[Danai]

Yes seasons do change your mood. most countries with less summer are more depressed because sun makes people happy... great poem

[Shabeeh Haider]

Danai, I am glad you agree that seasons can change ones mood

[Usman Muhammad]

Amazed to see how you compared seasons with the mood of humans. Humans are mostly influenced by 'what state they are in', in that specific moment. The way you retained the flow of the poem is impressive as well. The way we behave in our surrounding greatly depends on mood. And you did awesome work here to show how this unnoticed aspect of our life represents our life life in front of others.
Regards
Usman

[Shabeeh Haider]

Usman, thank you for your wonderful feed back

[Lydia Shutter]

Great couplets. Yes, the person you love can change the seasons when her/his mood changes. No matter what the weather outside, if the one you love is smiling and happy, you feel like springtime. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

Lydi, thank you for your supportive review

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Amazing poem there. You start with spring and summer, then you turn to the monsoon, then you talk of the autumn and finally you talk of the winter. Each season has been described well.
And, the last lines are excellent- rather, the last couplet is excellent.
Very well-written. Keep writing!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you, Vatsal for your very kind words

[Happy hours]

it's really nice that u mention all the seasons and at the same time balance the rhyming scheme of your poem...well done. :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you so much for your wonderful words