MY PAINTINGS

My paintings, my poems, my sculpture, my art,

I paint you on canvas and hide you in heart.

I draw you on paper and write you in verse,

The day I don’t dream you, that day is a curse.

The rose in my garden was covered with dew,

Or was it the rain that was falling on you.

Your hair on your face can turn day into night,

The way the black clouds hide the sun and its light.

To place you in verses, I find it so tough,

To write on your beauty words aren’t enough.

I paint you in colors and write you in ink,

But that says a fraction of all that I think.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It would be a huge honor to be thought of this way by anyone. I love the way you combine the various mediums of artistic endeavor we may use to try to express all that we're feeling inside. I love the way your words are selected for maximum imagery, such that it's like a combination poem & word painting. But the most impactful lines are the last two. It's expressed in a simple, clear way, but it's so very true-to-life for most of us. Just love those last 2 lines!

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Somehow words always fail to deliver out true thoughts

[barleygirl]

I almost ALWAYS feel like I'm not quite getting my arms around the full message I wish to make . . . *sigh*

[Shabeeh Haider]

[[HUGS]] All the best

[richieb]

Heartfelt expression of longing and affection. Our heart sometimes speaks a language that our mind cannot translate into words. Your poem speaks of this quite well.
Richie b.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Richie, thank you for your very kind words

[Lydia Shutter]

An all encompassing love....one that you simply must talk, write, and paint about. The adoration comes through loud and clear. good rhyming. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you, Lydia

[Nia Lisa]

I really like this line by you ''The rose in my garden was covered with dew,
Or was it the rain that was falling on you.'' there is subtlety in that line, which I would love to see even more in this poem. I definitely enjoyed the rhythm in this piece.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Nia for your kind words

[AliciaB]

This is so beautiful. It sincerely made me smile. First of all, the rhyme and rhythm are excellent. My only suggestion would be to use a question mark for the line "Or was it the rain that was falling on you." I LOVE the connections to art and nature. Both illustrate how the speaker attempts to give voice to their thoughts about this person, through creating something or through making analogies to the beautiful creation already around them. The lines "The rose in my garden was covered with dew, / Or was it the rain that was falling on you[?]" are wonderful. My favorite ones, however, are "I paint you in colors and write you in ink, / But that says a fraction of all that I think." Very expressive, and so lovely! Excellent work. Thank you for sharing this!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your wonderful and detailed suggestion and review

[Fahmida Mehreen]

"I paint you in colors and write you in ink,
But that says a fraction of all that I think."

Your closing lines never fail to entice me. Yet another marvelous piece.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you so much Fahmida. I was missing your reviews

[Fahmida Mehreen]

I am honored that you value my reviews. I absolutely love reading your pieces. :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am glad you enjoy them. Thank you once again

[zunie frost]

This is the most beautiful poem i have ever read ...... love every word of it

[Shabeeh Haider]

.....and this is the most beautiful review I have ever received. Thank you for your very generous comment

[zunie frost]

You are welcome

[Sheila Kline]

Blessed is the woman who receives such ravishing words written in her honor; "To place you in verses, I find it so tough".....yet you do so with expertise!
Lovely, romantic words of admiration!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Sheila for your very kind words

[James]

A lovely poem that anyone would want written about them.

[aLittlePain]

This is melodic, beautiful words inter woven.

Rach x

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you for your kind review

[Jon Roggie]

This is writing! You took a moment.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Jon