Inner Lock

Lost within myself,

With no way of getting out,

People lock me here,

Without hearing me shout.

 

Misunderstood,

 The key is thrown away,

Lost inside my body,

With nothing else to say.

 

Someday to come forth,

And show you all were wrong,

I will break free,

Of these locks, not after long.

 

And that day when I smile,

Light will descend upon the earth,

For I will be genuine,

The day of my souls rebirth.

Reviews

[NeverShoutKristeena Dro..]

Amazinggg

[loowzerX]

definitely well penned. :)

[The Cynic]

The meaning of this poem is one of my favorite ones; expression. I doubt there's one thing I value more than that, and that you can capture the essence of being repressed and craving that time when you can release your being, within four stanzas, is really commendable.

How you can just feel like theres no way for your mind to escape the confines of your skull, and how people can just refuse to listen to somebody without even thinking twice, seems well conveyed through the first two stanzas.

I'm not too sure about the third, the the whole 'light descending upon the earth' and 'soul rebirth', as they seem like something that applies to a whole lot of people. Maybe since the poem's about personal expression and all (as I perceive it at least), you might use something more personal, but still understandable?

Overall, great message, really enjoyed it.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I liked it. kinda straight forward but I liked it nonetheless.
the story of self trapped within self consciousness had been told without hiding yet it still managed to drawn myself to it. The ending was pretty much the answers for all the paragraphs above.