Doe Dum

Doe dum didily dee,
Close your eyes and count to three,
Doe dum didly doo,
Shivers come as the clock strikes two,
Doe dum didly done,
Cold steel knife as it drops to one,
Doe dum didly dead,
Cringe as the dog runs away with your head.

Author's Note

I apologize for the twistedness, it was meant to be nice and then wasn't.

Reviews

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

jesus h christ this was scary but its so bloody good! (notice what i did there cause its all bloody in the poem). anyway, you made really good use of language n stuff here and it makes it flow really well.

fun (not really) fact for you: did you know heads remain conscious for 8-10 seconds after they are removed?

Back to the review...this is really awesome!!!

[emipoemi]

Funny how writing veers when permitted to take the helm. This is catchy, and really has the air of a nursery rhyme or a song for children (even with the dark undertone......let's be honest, nursery rhymes and children's songs tend to have dark undertones once the research is made, lol). Well done!

[Relic]

haha, I wouldn't worry about how it was supposed to go. It came out twisted but enjoyable to me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but then life starts out to be nice, and then isn't.

lots of twists that twist us out of rhythm...and we often lose our head to angst and frustration.

"doo wah diddy diddy dum diddy doo"

"there she was walking down the street," and i lost my head and my heart.

[Eryn ♪]

Interesting take on it good sir. Thank you.

[Sabrina]

Oh my! A nicely written poem but a little creepy! I can't wait to read more of your writing as long as it isn't as violent. I agree it reminded me of a nursery rhyme. Then not.

[Tom McRoberts]

Ew, that's spooky! At first it really reminded me of a nursery-rhyme, then it quickly reminded me of why they're used so much in horror movies! I like it, a lot, keep it up!