Forever

Here I lie at the bottom
Once so strong I felt
Now here I am
The lowest low
The light has left
And darkness reigns
Hope is lost
Faith is dead
Tomorrow brings the end
Of my feeble life
I am afraid
But I move forward
I will rebuild what I have lost
My heart
My soul
My dreams
For myself
For my friends
I will keep fighting
It's who I am.

This is for a good friend of mine. He believed that poetry felt like a tease. Look deeper my friend, it is not about the story. It is about the feelings. Poetry is music. A song one must feel instead of hear.

Reviews

[Cousitarian]

This good friend of yours is a young man that enjoys the occasional poem or two. He absolutely respects those that create such short stories, flashes of feeling, out of nothing like you have done now. He is not stubborn nor blind but envious. He feels that poems simply attract a soul and leave it wanting. A poem is beautiful. Why can't there be more to them? They begin and end too quickly. They are powerful but leave many questions behind. What inspired the poem? Who is it about? Where does it go from there?

Simply, my friend, you are a poet while I am a writer. The both of us have our own creative souls. I cannot do what you do and feel comfortable about it. I'll admit, I can do a poem but it'll be a sloppy one. I can't easily make anything I write short. I need room to expand, to create, to build upon. I'm an enthusiast for making vast worlds, conflicts, along with stories. Where a poem does that for you, I write a fable instead.

And, perhaps, I don't have to justify myself. I'm being small minded by saying firstly that I despise poems. However, it's a feeling that remains unshakable and will stick around. Nonetheless, there are good poems out there that have proven me wrong. Yours included. So, continue to prove me wrong. Continue to give me a poem worth reading. Maybe that's my problem. I don't get to see enough good poems these days.

If you hadn't noticed, I liked this work. Very moving. Keep up the good work. :)

[Eryn ♪]

Thank you. You are amazing yourself to be able to write so much. I have not the same determination to do so. I understand what you mean about them being to short at times. It leaves you wanting more. Where a poet can write only a few lines a writer can expand it into something great. Alone either one is good, but together they rise ever higher; twin towers. This piece is for someone lost to find themselves and know that things aren't over because you have hit the bottom, for it is only when we reach the bottom of the pool that we may launch ourselves up towards the light.

[Cousitarian]

Yes, well said, my friend.