Chapter 4: Dark Times Upon Us

"Seth?" I heard his voice call out through the black fog surrounding me. "SETH! Oh my god guys he's okay."
"Joshua, where are you?" I asked, I could taste the dust settling in mouth.
"I'm right here man," his voice came from just over my shoulder. "Are you hurt?"
"I'm fine." I answered, "but this fog is so thick. I can't see anything."
"The dust has already settled, there isn't any fog."
"Right and I'm daredevil." I said smothering him with sarcasm.
"There is no fog Seth." came Jay's voice cutting into the darkness.
There was no denying it. No one argued. The harsh reality started setting in.
"But, but..." I stammered.
I felt like the minders before the meteor hit. It didn't make sense, I couldn't be blind.
"Come on, let's get him back to the base." The Japanese Lung called out.
I stood trying to find my balance, but it was impossible, like recovering from a rave. I felt a strong arm reach around my waist steadying me.
"Thanks Joshua, you're a life saver."
"Who are you talking to Dead Eyes." Clair spat. "Fine then your little boy friend can take care of you."
I felt her grip loosen and I was unceremoniously dump back on the shattered concrete. Pain arched through me. I could practically see it flowing through my body, radiating from the spot that hit a shard jutting out from the ground.
"Screw off Clair." Came Joshua's voice as I was once again lifted from the rubble.
"Seth and Joshy sitting in a tree..." Clair giggled ecstatically.
"I said screw off."
"Let's move Dragons, quickly now, before we get any unwanted attention." Jay's heavy voice filled the surrounding space, cutting off the insistent ringing in my ears. We started off at a rapid pace like we would any other day, but it was soon clear that I couldn't keep up with it. Each step echoed in my ears, causing my invisible world to spin out of control.
"What's wrong Dead Eyes? Tired already?"
I jumped. When had she gotten so close?
"Go on ahead, we'll catch up." I heard Joshua say reassuringly.
"What about the the ghosties? Aren't you scared?"
"No, we'll be fine."
"Hmph. Well okay then, meet you back at HQ."
I felt our pace slow and the spinning let up enough to ask the question I'd been dying to ask.
"So, what happened?"
"The world ended." He replied
"Huh?"
"It was so unreal. One minute the world was fine, minus the fact that you got caught. The next, the meteor hit right beside you. I thought you were a goner. The shock knocked out everything in a twenty meter radius. Everyone seemed okay, just frazzled, but then people started falling over. At first it seemed a ridiculous bout of fainting, but then it kept happening. People were dropping to the ground dead as door nails. We thought it was a gas, so we ran. But the commander stayed, he claimed that the "ghost " wasn't coming our way, that we were okay. We waited around for hours before they finally let me look for you."
"Whoa, intense. So that's why Clair called them ghosts." I said. It really did sound unreal, like something out of a crudely designed sci-fi game.
"Yeah." he whispered his voice holding a dark undertone. "Come on Seth, we're here."

Reviews

[Cousitarian]

Hm... Hm... Hm... I'm interested in this. VERY interested. Most of all in your point of view. You want my honest opinion though? Could I, uh, suggest that you sharpen your details, indent your sentences, give this tale background, as well as identify your characters better where you can? I have no idea where this story is taking place - like in the USA or Europe or what not - so its hard to grasp the reality of your fable. Also, what are minders? Are they human, machine? Apart for my lecture, I believe your story here is very much full of color in the chapters. You've done respectful nice work. Don't take what I said earlier personally either. I just feel a bit lost with your "Dragon" world. However, not enough to not stick around. Looking forward to the next chappy, friend. :)

[Eryn ♪]

Thanks so much. I will definitely take all that into account. I guess it could have been clearer but the story mentions the QEW in the first chapter which tells you that it's in Canada. but I'll make sure to get that all cleared up.
Thanks again.

[Cousitarian]

Glad to hear it and, also, I might be wrong then. I read and reread your stuff before saying anything because I wanted to be certain. Either way, you don't seem to be discouraged. Good. Make sure you post your next chapter soon. Otherwise, you're going to have a few impatient people. lol

[Eryn ♪]

will do. :)