Mind Collapse

I'm sure I was there...

When the universe collapses on my mind
Are you Seraphim's or am I, Not
stuck between a Sun and a Hard Rock

Looking into the great divide
the beating of my heart is the tap of snare
this bonding between the coffee of my heart
the grit and the grandeur

Hey Man hey Man!,...
I'm wide awake, growing thru Adaptation
to widdle the world down to a much more manageable size

Take a diamond from a coal
through the air I particle
When i drop from the sky
I snowflake the pure article
I still remain
an individual

Author's Note

writing outside the influence...

Reviews

[Muse]

The title alone is crafty. Writing outside the influence takes nerve for some people. To write only to please others. What's the point? Isn't writing and art supposed to be an extension of what inspires our soul? It's through our own birth of inspiration that we can influence others. To do it all backwards is in vain. It's not being true to the "you" that is begging to be shared with other creative minds in this world! Let the mind collapse...it's just unused air!

[Sethnicity]

Blessings and thank you for tasting of my thoughts.
I am about to expound a pone these thoughts...

[Kristallo]

This is terrific, Seth. I really enjoyed the symbolism and flow, and paired with "wish you were here" Radiohead cover, it was the perfect combination. I loved the last stanza especially... "Through the air I particle, when I drop from the sky- I snowflake the pure article. I still remain an individual." Wonderfully written, indeed!

[Cassie Fraga]

I appreciate the rawness in this write... the flow of your pieces are always so free.. I love it!! very well penned my friend!!

[Priscilla Sayers]

What a fabulous influence! Snap. Snap, snap... I totally dig that!
I seriously love that depth. Keep 'em comin'!

[Poetic Beauty]

I like the thought of releasing the emotions and making the world a little smaller and continuing to be your own person.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Writing under the influence seems to work for you, strong rhyme and a natural flow. I like the contrasting thoughts that frame up this piece of poetry

[ThomasHinyard]

If this is how you write under the influence... :)
It's brilliant.
Took me to a cosmic world.

[Sethnicity]

Thanks! if you can grasp the tangible in tangibles I'm speaking of then you will really enjoy my work...

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Under the influence of what? I lenjoyed the journey into your subconcious, it was liberating.

[TomQuick]

I love this kind of surrealist, subconscious poetry. you seem like a highly philosophical individual.