Chilled

Just feeling...sad.

Sadness of the heart is cold

for the young and for the old.

It freezes your senses

like the air

at the long rusted fences

of the winter-woe fair.

You feel all is gray

on this mid-Winter day

and that May

may never come.

Reviews

[Satchmo's Gal]

Short not so sweet and to the point. I like it.

[Angel's Lady]

Melancholy is but a trace
of a fingertip along a face...
A forgotten memory
of time and space...
Full of eloquence and grace.
And so was this piece
of your heart as you raged
written and chilled
and put to this page.

Nicely done!

[Last Lying Look]

Ah, sadness.
This is a great write.
Though it's short you've captured the feeling well.
Awesome piece!
-Elissa :)

[The Purple Kazoo]

this is good. and one of your first poems? even better. sasuke uchicha is right, you can write. (i'm one of those friends she recommended it to.) i get what this poem is about; i was feeling exactly the same last month. damn february. so gloomy. one little thing: the title doesn't really do this poem justice. might i suggest something more...creative or breath-taking? i don't know of anything offhand, but this poem deserves better than 'sadness.' overall, great job.

[Kasey]

dude. seth. i didnt know u cud.... write... woah.... ok this is amazing, i am reccomending this to my friends on here. holy cow. this is amazing for your first real poem. definately better than my first, or my most recent for that matter. lmao. this is amazing.

[King_of_Hearts]

Sure you can put it on ur site.

[Owen]

Interesting, if a bit, um... sad. ;)

[HamonoAkira]

Very short and very nice. I absolutely like your metaphor. I can feel the chill of the coldness of sadness. I rarely like love poems but this one is a great piece. May I post this in my website? I'll promise to tag you as the author. This is really nice. :)