Lost Riddle

 

Once broken inside, and shielded from the world I hide.

 

Barriers built to be broken.

 

A closed circle of friends, hardly letting anyone in.

 

No light shinning through lost in the darkness.

 

My head pounding, my screams echoing.

 

Lost, but found by one, able to chase it all away.

 

The screaming stops and a small light comes on

 

Drawing nearer, but secrets hidden, a part of me opens.

 

His voice draws me out,

 

His touch awakens a part of me,

 

His love cradles me.

 

No longer lost, but found, a part of me is out.

Reviews

[Rainbow Skank]

Beautiful! I love how it's so colorful. :D

[Noah]

Beautifully written. I had to highlight the yellow in order to read it but aside from that i loved it.

[Ruby Moon]

the only drawback is using yellow as your font =
i can understand why you would want to use yellow as the light
but would a different shade or colour be better?
instead of the yellow glare of the afternoon sun, how about the colours of the sun as it glows in the sky at sunrise or sunset... =)

[Susan14]

This my friend is a lovely poem. I tried to see if their were hidden sentences among the colored parts but i couldn't find any. To tell you the truth it was sort of hard to read with all the different colors, otherwise a well written poem. Well done.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Great poem ^^
I also tried to look for hidden sentences among the colored parts, but either the colors themselves deceived me (it was actually a bit hard to read) or I'm just not that good at finding secrets, maybe there were none?
Nevertheless a great poem, good work

[Luchia Noname]

i love this it is so sweet :) nice job